Talk:Bruno Mars: 24K Magic Live at the Apollo/GA2

GA Reassessment
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I will reassess this article in the days to come. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:45, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

New comments

 * depicted → depicted (Synopsis should always be in present form)
 * The Hooligans → link to The Hooligans (unless there is a reason not to)
 * most of his third studio album → most of Mars' (since you're talking about The Hooligans prior to this)
 * The Televison special → The television special
 * while others complimented his vocals → while others complimented Mars' vocals
 * of the album's deluxe edition → of the 24K Magic deluxe edition (for better clarity)

New comments

 * Promotional poster of the TV Special, titled 24K Magic Live at the Apollo, including Mars and his band → A promotional poster for the television special, showing Mars and his band in front of the Apollo Theater. Several reviews and the title are superimposed.
 * link New York City in the infobox

New comments

 * link New York City on first instance
 * at from 10 11:00 PM → from 10-11:00 PM
 * partnered with Bruno Mars to premiere → partnered with Mars to premiere
 * and his bandmates The Hooligans interacting → and his bandmates—The Hooligans—interacting
 * that only at this point in his career did he feel prepared → that only at this point in his career he had felt prepared
 * as they, previously, had shown → as it had previously shown
 * disapproval towards other artists → "rejection of other artists" sounds better
 * at "Amateur Night at the Apollo" → at another live event, Amateur Night at the Apollo (no need for "")
 * because it is a "magical place" → because it was a "magical place"
 * Connect the fourth paragraph with the third one
 * includes the one-disc Blu-ray, featuring the TV special → includes a one-disc Blu-ray featuring the television special
 * link Warner Music
 * it contains photographs → containing photographs
 * shots behind the scenes while making the show → behind-the-scenes shots (it is clear what those are)
 * and and other previously
 * unreleased photos → unreleased footage

New comments

 * Apollo Theater's iconic marquee → "iconic" needs to be removed; it strongly goes against WP:FANCRUFT
 * after traffic has been → after traffic had been
 * beginning with Mars saying → "beginning" is superfluous
 * Mars performs several → For a better flow: "Mars subsequently performs several"
 * At the end of the cover, he wishes → ...Mars wishes
 * with a black neckband collar → alongside a... (to avoid repeating "with")

New comments

 * Amanda Petrusich writing for The New Yorker praised → Amanda Petrusich, writing for The New Yorker, praised
 * saying "the strength of his performance of the song was undeniable." → saying "[...] [its] strength [...] was undeniable".
 * in the category of Outstanding Music Direction.[18] In 2019, it was nominated for Outstanding Variety Show - Series or Special at the 50th NAACP Image Awards → in the category of Outstanding Music Direction,[18] as well as for Outstanding Variety Show - Series or Special at the 50th NAACP Image Awards in 2019

Outcome
It was my first time writing an article of this kind. It was hard to find others that looked like this promoted to GA to get a good grasp of it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:05, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * So... I have reviewed the article. Sadly, it is quite far away from being listed at GA. There is weird writing, superfluous information and unclear things on several instances. However, I am willing to wait for you to address these issues so that I can check this again and, perhaps, promote. I'm wishing you a great Sunday, and see you soon; Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:54, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Finished to adress your concerns, I left comments here and there so please take a look. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:25, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Hi! I have left secondary comments. The article is beginning to look a lot better now. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:38, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I believe I have address everyhting. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:30, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for sticking through this. I have made some closing changes on my own, and I strongly believe the article now meets GA criteria. Congratulations and greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:54, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * thank you for your time and patience. I just changed a little thing. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:58, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Apologies, I forgot to close this. Everything has been solved, the article can remain listed as a GA. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:39, 11 April 2020 (UTC)