Talk:Bund Bull/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Racepacket (talk) 04:36, 31 May 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for nominating this article. I enjoyed it. No disamb. or invalid external links.
 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * "The bronze bull was crafted in"->"The bronze bull was fabricated in" - did the artist do the design work in Wyoming or just the casting at scale?
 * "It is located in the Bund, which is considered to be a location that symbolizes the era of European colonial capitalism in China, and it will it adjacent to the Huangpu river in Shanghai's Pudong district, which is a dynamically growing economic development zone.[7]" - run on sentence. Typo for "be"? Colonial capitalism is POV. First say clearly where the work has been placed and then explain significance.
 * Redundant - "the Bund Bull's male genitalia is rumored to produce good luck when stroked.[2]" - a bull would not have female genitalia.
 * "Pursuit of this kind of good fortune has contributed to the Bull's needing to be cordoned off and guarded, unlike the Wall Street Bull.[9]" - passive voice. Say who identified a need to cordon off the bull, and then explain why the decision-maker changed his/her/its mind.
 * There are two separate ideas here - stroking genitalia for good luck and climbing for prayer. Both may have prompted the need to protect the work.  However, each must be separately sourced and explained.
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * Fn 1 and 7 require registration to access.
 * Please note that fn 8 is a paid source.
 * Fn 9 says the Bund Bull is twice the size as the Wall Street Bull. Article says they are the same size. Please explain. Fn 6 says it is twice the weight as the Wall Street Bull. Fn 2 says same size and weight as Wall Street Bull. Help.
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Article does not explain how and who commissioned this work. Did they ask for a replica or something distinctively different?
 * Article states that 5 were cast. What happened to the other four?
 * Explain why the work is not located in the financial district itself. Explain what relationship exists between the site of the work and the Expo grounds.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * No edit wars.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I am placing the article on hold so that you may address the above noted concerns. Racepacket (talk) 05:23, 31 May 2011 (UTC)
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * No edit wars.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I am placing the article on hold so that you may address the above noted concerns. Racepacket (talk) 05:23, 31 May 2011 (UTC)
 * I am placing the article on hold so that you may address the above noted concerns. Racepacket (talk) 05:23, 31 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Nomination withdrawn. This subject needs some scholarly or higher quality sources to address some of the issues raised here.  This article is not truly GA level and I can not move forward in good conscience given the depth of concerns raised without better sources. I greatly appreciate the extremely high quality review for such a marginal quality article.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:52, 31 May 2011 (UTC)
 * I understand. I hope the review will remain on the talk page to guide the future work of other editors seeking to improve the article. Racepacket (talk) 12:18, 31 May 2011 (UTC)