Talk:Burr Caswell/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:17, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * User:The Rambling Man Looking forward to your review. You criticisms and issues are always spot on.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:20, 28 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Cheers Doug, I intend to get to this tomorrow. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 20:28, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * The first two sentences seem to say the same thing.
 * ✅ Copy edited. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:00, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Caswell was born in..." this para is clunky, four or five very short paras, suggest a bit of a merge to improve the flow.
 * ✅ Copy edited. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:20, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "a couple of years" not particularly encyclopedic tone.
 * ✅ Copy edited. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:20, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "some 30 miles" convert.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:29, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "year's worth of provisions for their journey to Michigan" for us non-US readers, is there some way of expressing how long this journey was?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Link schooner.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "they got to" ->"they arrived at the"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "built a small ... It was built" repetitive.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "very near its" -> "very close to its"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Mason County officially became a county" link "county" and what was it before it became an "official" county?!
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * link for shingles?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "which sprang up" tone.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "a shingle mill in Ludington" link shingle mill first time.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "from January 9, 1874 to" comma after 1874.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "large hotel, The family returned" full stop, not comma.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "where Caswell ten years" died?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "... Ludington beside his first wife" this para has no references.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Mary Caswell image is too small.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Edgar achieved fame as a prominent" -> "Edgar became a prominent"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "temporary jail.[24][16][23] The" ref order.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Registered State Historic Site" no link?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Maybe too many images of the house, the first and third include the same bookcase for example.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Consistent ISBN formats.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:46, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 07:43, 29 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. I'll get started on it.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 08:51, 29 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:46, 29 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Happy with this Doug, so promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 20:25, 29 March 2021 (UTC)