Talk:Burundi/GA2

GA Review
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 * Stagger the images left and right so there isn't a lot of them on the right side per MOS:IMAGE. Also, the fixed widths on most of them are unnecessary; usually it's only necessary if a minimum width is needed to be able to read some text that is important to the understanding of the image.
 * ✅  miranda   23:46, 18 September 2008 (UTC)


 * References needed:
 * "Another major lake is Lake Tanganyika, located in Burundi's southwest corner."
 * ✅  miranda   00:57, 19 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Some of the references are incorrectly formatted per WP:CITE/ES. I strongly suggest using cite web for the references instead. Examples include:
 * "Burundi. International Center for Transitional Justice Retrieved on July 27, 2008." missing a period.
 * "Global Ceasefire Agreement between Burundi and the CNDD-FDD. November 20, 2003. United Nations Security Council. Relief Web. Retrieved July 24, 2008." – "Relief Web" goes before "United Nations Security Council" and should be italicized.
 * ✅ to both. I kind of object to using citeweb, because in some instances citeweb doesn't properly format some citations. Whenever I use citeweb, I am usually prepping the article for FA. I am not so in this case.  miranda   00:16, 19 September 2008 (UTC)


 * En dashes must be used for page ranges per WP:DASH
 * ✅ Replaced all of these.  miranda   23:57, 18 September 2008 (UTC)


 * "Puddington, A., Freedom of the World, p. 145.", "Puddington, A., Freedom of the World, p. 145-146.", and "Puddington, A., Freedom of the World, p. 146." could be merged and only use the "145–146" page range.
 * Well, I kind of object to this because the one fact isn't located on both pages. One fact, if I recall correctly, is located in a table on one page. And, the other fact is located as text.  miranda   23:57, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I agree with miranda on this one. Kaldari (talk) 22:24, 30 September 2008 (UTC)

Gary King ( talk ) 15:06, 18 September 2008 (UTC)


 * A lot of red links in "Culture". Perhaps unlink the red links?
 * Numerical ranges including page ranges and date ranges must use an en dash per WP:DASH (such as for "338-9", "1945-1996")
 * "# ^ a b c Burundi - Politics. Canadian Council on Africa. Retrieved on June 30, 2008." is dead
 * The article needs a copyedit. A lot of the paragraphs are made up of many short sentences; some could be merged to make them flow better. For instance:
 * "Burundi is known as one of the ten" &rarr; "Burundi is one of the ten"
 * "Early settlement" strikes me as a single paragraph with many, short sentences. Perhaps merge some to make them flow better.
 * Another example: "In 1993, Burundi held the first democratic presidential elections; the Hutu-dominated Front for Democracy in Burundi (FRODEBU) won." could be "In 1993, the Hutu-dominated Front for Democracy in Burundi (FRODEBU) won Burundi's first democratic presidential elections."

Gary King ( talk ) 17:15, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks, Gary! I have addressed your concerns relating to this article. I do believe that this article needs copyediting, but the problem with Burundi is that little sources are available for Early History as well as other topics in the article.  miranda   04:25, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I still think the prose generally requires more work. There are a lot of pairs of sentences that could easily be merged to make the paragraphs flow better, such as "The Transitional Senate has fifty-one members. Three seats are reserved for former presidents." &rarr; "The Transitional Senate has fifty-one members, and three seats are reserved for former presidents." Gary King ( talk ) 14:26, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I have asked some people to copyedit the article. Thanks.  miranda   00:59, 22 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Any update? There are a few places where you can look for copyeditors; WP:PRV could be useful. Gary King ( talk ) 16:28, 27 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I asked some people.  miranda   03:38, 29 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Perhaps I should close this review for now to give you more time to work on it? Gary King ( talk ) 19:28, 9 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I really don't see any more problems of the article, since I have addressed your issues and other people have copyedited the article. I am not reaching for FA, but GA.  miranda   18:58, 10 October 2008 (UTC)


 * Passing Gary King ( talk ) 17:39, 11 October 2008 (UTC)