Talk:Bury a Friend/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 14:29, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

Stability is back, time to review! --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:29, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good
 * "singer Billie Eilish." → "singer Billie Eilish from her debut studio album, When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go? (2019)." since you should mention what album it's from before the fact that it is a single
 * "as the third single from Eilish's..." → "as the third single from the album"
 * "American alternative radio stations" → "US alternative radio stations" as American is too vague; North and South are respective contents...
 * "2019 through Darkroom" → "2019, with both releases occurring through Darkroom"
 * "During the dark and violent lyrics" → "Within the dark and violent lyrics"
 * "Australia and the United Kingdom" → "Australia, and the United Kingdom"
 * "the song's release" → "the song's initial release" to specify it was in Jan
 * "initial" implies that there were multiple versions of the song; it wasn't the case. I don*t think this helps too much...
 * Alright


 * "—who provides uncredited vocals on the song—" → ", who provides uncredited vocals on the song," so that we know Eilish is the one being pulled
 * "at venues including" → "at venues in 2019, including"
 * Remove 2019 from before the tour in this context

Background and development

 * "American alternative radio stations" → "US alternative radio stations" as per lead
 * "to make his acquaintance" → "to make him her acquaintance"

Composition and lyrical interpretation

 * "credits the song" → "credited the song"
 * "as a synth-pop,[11] and electronica track in press reviews.[12]" → "as a synth-pop and electronica track in press reviews.[11][12]" comma is not needed and ref 11 can then go at the end of the sentence
 * Target goth to Gothic rock
 * ""Bury a Friend" is moderately" → "The song is moderately"
 * Target beats per minute to Tempo
 * Ref 15 should be at the end of the sentence and the one after 8
 * Target hip hop to Hip hop music
 * "screams, as well as a screeching" → "screams, and a screeching"
 * Target orthodontist to Orthodontics
 * Italicize Vox
 * Target chorus to Refrain
 * "the Doors’" → "the Doors' single"
 * "herself [...])."[23]" → "herself [...])".[23]"
 * Ref 28 should be at the end of the sentence and the one after 14

Reception

 * Img needs alt text
 * "Upon its release," → "Upon release,"
 * Target music critics to Music journalism
 * "as well as a highlight on" → "as well as a highlight of"
 * "its production to that" → "its production to that"
 * "Kanye West's" → "West's" as we have already mentioned him and remove the wikilink to the rapper
 * "nightmarish [...] and somehow" → "nightmarish" and claimed that "somehow"
 * "specific and creepy."[30]" → "specific and creepy".[30]"
 * "commented the "sinister [nature]" → "commented on the song's "sinister [nature]"
 * "lyric, [...] unsettling [...], but there's something" → "lyric" and claimed that it is "unsettling", despite there being "something"
 * "excellent", as well as noticed" → "excellent", and also noted"
 * "Cantie of" → "Samantha Cantie of"
 * "as a priority. [...] The" → "as a priority", and elaborated, stating: "The"
 * "before moving to number 14" → "before moving 60 places to number 14"
 * Instead at the time wikilink, maybe use a note for writing that "Bad Guy" surpassed it?
 * Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on the second mention in this para
 * "topping the Alternative Songs chart" → "topping the US Alternative Songs chart"
 * "only the 10th solo woman" → "only the tenth solo woman"
 * "first top 10 in the country" → "first top ten on the UK Singles Chart"
 * "the top 10 in countries" → "the top ten in countries"

Music video

 * "and has thus been regarded" → "which have led to it being regarded"
 * "Eilish elaborated" → "Eilish explained"
 * "from a nightmare as a" → "from a nightmare while a"
 * "disappears under Mehki's bed.[10] Scenes also see" → "disappears under Mehki's bed,[10] with scenes also seeing" as the sentences can be merged

Live performances and other usage

 * Img needs alt text
 * First sentence is not needed as it is stating the obvious
 * "She appeared on" → "Eilish performed the song on"
 * "black sweater and shorts alongside" → "black sweater and shorts, alongside"
 * "She further sang it" → "She later sang it"
 * "The remix sees the original song "run [...] through" → "Bein stated that the remix takes the original song and "runs it through"
 * "the later half."[59]" → "the later half".[59]"

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Weekly charts

 * Remove Digital Song Sales and Alternative Songs per CHARTS

Year-end charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * Isn't RIAA supposed to be sales+streaming and BPI shipments?
 * I use the templates, I think they display correct information, though.

Release history

 * Think we could get this table in to improve the article as the required information exists?
 * We don't know the medium it was released on on January 30. And in addition to that we only know the release date for the US alternative radio. I personally don't think we need an extra table for the minimum of info we have.
 * Fine

Final comments and verdict

 * until the changes are made, great job here though! --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:17, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I solved all the concerns apart from where commented. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:05, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Made a few minor tweaks, but now it's time... ✅! --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:46, 17 March 2020 (UTC)