Talk:Buster Posey/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: EricEnfermero (talk · contribs) 06:14, 8 February 2013 (UTC)

I will be glad to review this article. In the next few days I'll carefully read through the article and leave some initial feedback. Thanks! EricEnfermero Howdy! 06:14, 8 February 2013 (UTC)

Good job on an article that reflects a great deal of research. My comments are mostly related to ensuring that the language is clear and concise. The issues should be pretty easy to sort out.

Lead

 * Looks good; just keep in mind that the lead should summarize the information in each section of the body. It lacks anything from the Early years section and the very short Personal life section. Having a sentence about high school will give some context to the statement that he began playing catcher in college. ✅


 * For conciseness, change "first came up" to "came up". ✅
 * Same thing for "every single inning" - "every inning". ✅
 * It sounds more encyclopedic to say that he was injured in a collision with Scott Cousins, rather than saying that Cousins severely injured him. ✅
 * The "He became the seventh Giants..." sentence is a little hard to follow at first. The part about being the seventh Giant isn't covered in the body, so I'd take it out. ✅

Early years

 * For better readability, take out "along with baseball" since that is clarified at the end of the sentence. ✅
 * "Meanwhile" starts two consecutive sentences; both are probably unnecessary. ✅

College career

 * It says that he began his freshman year at shortstop. It might be less confusing to say he played shortstop as a freshman and then say he moved to catcher as a sophomore. ✅
 * "After just one season..." - might change to "After his first season of..." to make it sound more neutral.

Professional career

 * Spring training is usually not capitalized on WP, even though it is in the giants.mlb.com sources. ✅
 * Same thing for major league when not referring expressly to the Major League Baseball organization. ✅
 * Class A advanced affliate - capitalize Advanced (Class A Advanced is separate from A ball) ✅
 * 2010 (Rookie Season) heading - lower case for season ✅
 * In the third paragraph of the same section, clarify the feat that it refers to. A game-winning HR? An eighth-inning game-winning HR? ✅
 * "taking 20 first place votes" - not sure about the grammar ✅
 * In the 2011 section, probably no need to link ankle as it is a common word. ✅
 * 2012 (MVP Season) - lower case for season ✅
 * "he asked Major League Baseball (MLB) to rule himself ineligible" - just use MLB and change to "rule him ineligible" ✅
 * Consider adding something about the recent multimillion dollar contract he signed.
 * Posey did not sign a multimillion dollar contract recently. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:22, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
 * One year, $8,000,000 - reported by the SF Chronicle around January 18, unless I'm misreading something. EricEnfermero  Howdy! 22:53, 10 February 2013 (UTC)

Personal life

 * The semicolon is out of place before the baby names. ✅

Checklist
Thanks for a good read. Promoting to Good Article status. EricEnfermero Howdy! 00:56, 12 February 2013 (UTC)