Talk:CSS General M. Jeff Thompson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 15:08, 17 April 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Harrias (he/him) • talk 15:08, 17 April 2023 (UTC)

Images

 * 6a. Symbol question.svg Source link on Commons doesn't work, suggest replacing it with https://www.history.navy.mil/content/history/nhhc/our-collections/photography/numerical-list-of-images/nhhc-series/nh-series/NH-42000/NH-42367.html The license says "This file is a work of a sailor or employee of the U.S. Navy, taken or made as part of that person's official duties.", but it is listed as having an "Unknown author", and the source page I linked to doesn't give any further information: I don't see any evidence for use of this particular tag. If we have evidence of it being published before 1928, which is likely, we could use PD-US-expired, but again, we'd need evidence of that.
 * I've subbed in a lower-quality but easier to verify pre-1928 publishing image for now, and will restore the other one if I can turn up good evidence of pre-1928 publication in the future
 * Back to a better version of the original file with documented 1862 publication
 * 6b. Symbol confirmed.svg The only image used is relevant and suitably captioned.

Prose

 * 1a. Symbol confirmed.svg A couple of minor points below, but this meets the criteria.
 * "..attacked, brining on the.." Typo.
 * "..with his ship captains." Personal preference: "..with his ships' captains."
 * 1b. Symbol confirmed.svg Again, some minor points below, but neither prevents the article meeting the criteria.
 * "..by captain J. E. Montgomery.." Why no capital letter for "captain" as a title?
 * "Thompson himself described General M. Jeff Thompson as "the largest and best, but slowest Boat of the fleet"." No need for the capitalised "boat" in the quote; per MOS:CONFORM, we usually adopt Wikipedia's style guide for typography of quotes.


 * 3a. Symbol question.svg Some points below. None are major, but I think they would help improve the article. Feel free to disagree.
 * "The ship was named for M. Jeff Thompson, an officer in the Missouri State Guard." Maybe specify that Thompson was a senior officer?
 * "General M. Jeff Thompson was sent to Fort Pillow, where she participated in the naval defense of Memphis, Tennessee." Could we add a bit more context here; where was Fort Pillow? (x miles north along the river from Memphis) or something similar.
 * "..the Battle of Plum Point Bend. General M. Jeff Thompson was involved in the battle, but only to the extent of cannon fire." Add clarity; was Jeff firing her cannons, or receiving cannon fire? Also, who won this battle?
 * "The Confederates abandoned Fort Pillow on June 1, falling back to Memphis." According to the sources, Jeff was involved in covering this withdrawal, which seems worth adding.
 * "..and caused another wreck in January 1867 when the steamboat named Platte Valley hit General M. Jeff Thompsons's remains." Would seem worth adding that this caused significant casualties.
 * 3b. Symbol confirmed.svg No concerns.
 * 4. Symbol confirmed.svg No concerns.
 * 5. Symbol confirmed.svg No concerns.

Overall, an enjoyable read and a good article. A few queries above, most of which aren't covered by the GA criteria, but I think would improve the article nonetheless. I'll watch this page, but a ping would be helpful when you're done. I'll stick this on hold. Harrias (he/him) • talk 11:33, 18 April 2023 (UTC)
 * - I think I've addressed everything. Hog Farm Talk 23:45, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Just as clarification, I have addressed all of these, even where not noted here. diff for block of changes here. Hog Farm Talk 19:21, 21 April 2023 (UTC)