Talk:Cadet scandal/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:40, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

I will be taking a look at this! —  Ghost River  16:40, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

Lede

 * Swap em dashes for commas around "also known as the Ballvé Case (Spanish: Caso Ballvé)"
 * Done


 * "whose content" "the contents of which"
 * Done

Political and military context

 * in the context of the Second World War, in which the country maintained its neutrality. fragment
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 * "and the party system"
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 * "Thanks to the coup" "Under Uriburu's coup"
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 * "was declared the winner"
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 * "spin-off" "offshoot"
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Gay culture in Buenos Aires

 * Delink "turn of the century" per MOS:OVERLINK
 * Done


 * "name by which they were also referred to." "a name which also came to describe its speakers."
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 * Delink "effeminate" and "amoral" per MOS:OVERLINK
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 * Comma after "sought to modernize the country"
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 * Delink "cliché" and "aristocrat" per MOS:OVERLINK
 * Done

Ballvé Piñero's parties

 * "eighteen years younger" "18 years his junior"
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 * Delink "vice" and "(substance) abuse" per MOS:OVERLINK
 * Done


 * "name which alluded to the" "named for the"
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 * Swap colon for comma after "in his own words"
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 * "In medical experts" "To medical experts"
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Investigation and arrest

 * "him seduce other cadets" "as he seduced other cadets"
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 * Delink "birthday party", "discharge", and "lawsuit" per MOS:OVERLINK
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 * "one hundred and twenty-one" "121" per MOS:NUM
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Society and politics

 * "the public rumor ahd begun to spread around the general public"
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 * "about who the men involved were" "the identities of the men involved"
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 * "a big street fighting occurred" "a large street fight" without the WL
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 * "a number that parodied" "a number parodying"
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 * comma for em dash after "June 4, 1943,"
 * Done

Ensuing gay persecution

 * "Goodwin was apprehend the same day as his friend," "Goodwin was apprehended the same day as his friend"
 * Done


 * "the age of majority until July—which was 22 years old at the time—" ((right arrow)) "the age of majority (which, at the time, was 22 years old) until July"
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 * Delink "bestseller" per MOS:OVERLINK
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 * "but rather "being" homosexual, becoming a cause of discharge from the army." "but rather simply "being" homosexual was now a cause for discharge."
 * Done

Legacy

 * "that the scandal opened "ajar the door...""
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 * "he got access" "he received access"
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 * "more than two hundred" "more than 200" per MOS:NUM
 * Done

General comments

 * All pictures used are public domain and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Copyvio score looks good at 5.7%

Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. —  Ghost River  19:18, 16 October 2021 (UTC)


 * , thank you for taking a look. I've made the corrections. Let me know if everything's ok! --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 18:31, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks great now, happy to pass! —  Ghost River  18:36, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you! --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 18:47, 17 October 2021 (UTC)