Talk:Cal Neva Lodge & Casino/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SchroCat (talk · contribs) 09:19, 9 December 2015 (UTC)

I'll pick this up and will review over the next day or so. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 09:19, 9 December 2015 (UTC)

General
 * There are some British spellings in there which should probably be swapped for the AmEng version. These include: licence, legalised, rumours and licencing. As I'm English, I'm less sure of the US spelling of "ten storey expansion" (although ten-storey should be hyphenated, whatever the spelling). I'll be back anon. - SchroCat (talk) 11:38, 9 December 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing - I've rectified those EnEnglish issues - unfortunatly in this case I'm British and I just don't know the majority of the differences. I checked "story" and you were right, it should have been "storey". Miyagawa (talk) 14:02, 9 December 2015 (UTC)


 * You need to standardise between lodge and Lodge. I suggest Lodge when used as part of the name; lodge when talking about "the lodge". – SchroCat (talk) 21:07, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
 * Completed as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)

Early period
 * Col Betts: I presume his body was found?
 * Yep, I've changed that to be clear. Miyagawa (talk) 10:54, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * How come state legislation was changed to allow gambling after 1937, but Bow bounced casino cheques in 1926?
 * I don't have a source to state this, but I think the only way they could have been so open about the gambling would be if the gaming room was on the California side of the border prior to the fire. California allowed blackjack and other card games, but no dice games. So when the hotel was remodeled and the writing was on the wall for Nevada to legalise everything, they rebuilt the gaming room on the other side of the border. But I don't have a cite for that. Miyagawa (talk) 10:54, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * "The 1937 reconstruction effort took 30 days..." I'd move this up to where the reconstruction is mentioned.
 * Done. Miyagawa (talk) 10:54, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * "The first name band" I'm not sure what this is saying: I think it could be rephrased in more encyclopaedic language
 * Changed to "nationally famous". Miyagawa (talk) 10:54, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * I'd trim the surname off John F on the first mention as you have with Robert.
 * Done. Miyagawa (talk) 10:54, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * Ditto on the second mention
 * Done. Miyagawa (talk) 10:54, 11 December 2015 (UTC)

More to follow. – SchroCat (talk) 10:01, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * Ownership
 * There is a "wasn't" in there which shouldn't be there.
 * Fixed. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * "1962 also saw": needs a twk as a year can't see
 * Rephrased. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * "Following Giancana's ban from the state..." This is phrased as if we've already been told he was banned. Perhaps a rephrase?
 * Re-phrased. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * Sanicola resigned? I think you need to say what he's resigned: all we know is that he's a shareholder, which isn't a position from which one can "resign"
 * I've re-phrased that. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * It should be a lower case C on casino when not a title
 * Fixed the uppercase ones. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * Later period
 * "The two clubs were purchased for a total of $9 million.[45] But the trio failed in their request for licensing due to a lack of finances" This bit needs re-phrasing, as I'm not sure what you're saying here
 * I've expanded the second sentence to explain more fully what I meant. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * "While you're re-working this point, this sentence goes on for too long and needs to be split: "But the trio failed in their request for licensing due to a lack of finances,[47] and the First National Bank of Nevada foreclosed on the property in early 1976 before selling it to Kirk Kerkorian, a significant shareholder in Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer.[48]"
 * I've split it in two following that expansion. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * "Daow Aga Pow-wow": I think you need a couple of words to explain what that is
 * Done. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)


 * Architecture
 * "decorated as a typical lodge": perhaps "decorated in the lodge-style" would be better.
 * Changed as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)

That's it from me. Pretty good all round, apart from the slightly lumpy text about ownership near the beginning of the Later Period section. Cheers. – SchroCat (talk) 22:37, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing, I think I've edited where requested, but you might want to double check I've got everything. Miyagawa (talk) 23:40, 11 December 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:

Good job - ands a nice way to mark Sinatra's 100th birthday! - SchroCat (talk) 07:11, 12 December 2015 (UTC)
 * Awesome, thank you. Miyagawa (talk) 09:29, 12 December 2015 (UTC)

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