Talk:California Gurls/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One 01:59, 22 June 2012 (UTC)

Info box

 * Order the genres alphabetically.

Lead

 * Critical reception of "California Gurls" has been near universally positive → "California Gurls" garnered positive reviews from ''music critics,
 * Link music video

Background and composition

 * Link texted, as some people may not know what that means. For example I think American's say paged and SMS?
 * By having a picture in this section, the block quote just looks like a paragraph, you might want to put the picture somewhere else in the article? Or put it on the right and the audio file on the left?
 * Perry's site → website?
 * According to digital sheet music published at Musicnotes.com by Sony-ATV Music Publishing, → remove
 * I think this section could be improve further, it is a bit conversational in some places.

Critical reception

 * Amy Sciaretto of websiteArtistdirect → Need a space in between website and Artistdirect
 * You like to use a lot of quotes don't you! Some need to be paraphrased as it consists basically of quotes at the moment. WP:QUOTEFARM
 * On May 25, 2012,Billboard → Need a space in between the comma and Billboard

Chart performance

 * "California Gurls" sold 294,000 digital downloads in its first week and debuted at number one on the US Billboard Digital Songs chart. It debuted at number two on the Billboard Hot 100, making it Perry's highest debut on the chart since 2008 with her debut single "I Kissed a Girl". On the issue dated June 19, 2010, the song reached number one, becoming Perry's second number-one song and Snoop Dogg's third.[28] → Is this all supported by ref 28? If yes, put the ref at the end of each sentence.
 * First line says it sold 294,000 in it's first week, but a bit further down says 318,000?
 * and also received Gold certification from RIANZ. → WP:OR
 * (meaning it has sold over 600,000 units) → (denoting sales of over 600,000 units)

Music video (both sections)

 * she said. → Remove, keep as one quote but put a full stop.
 * The settings are inspired in part by Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, and the board game Candy Land, → Sources?
 * What is "in a nod" ?

Live performances

 * Perry was the musical guest on the NBC variety series Saturday Night Live on September 25, 2010, (hosted by Amy Poehler) and performed the song live during the first music session of the program. → WP:OR
 * Perry performed the song on The GRAMMY Nominations Concert Live! – Countdown to Music's Biggest Night on December 1, 2010. "California Gurls" was included as the encore for her California Dreams Tour. → WP:OR

Covers, samples, and media usage

 * I did a slight c/e

Track listings

 * Spilt into two columns

Charts and certifications

 * Tables should be marked up for WP:ACCESS. Ask if you don't know what this is, or would like me to do it for you.
 * Bulgaria has a dead link tag against it.
 * The year-end table doesn't need Billboard, Official Charts Company etc.
 * Chart precession and succession table, I'm pretty sure that we don't use this now.

Summary
I'm really sorry, but in addition to the large amount of mistakes in the references, there are some cases of WP:OR and prose issues, I'm failing this article. Spend some time going through each section throughly, and perhaps read them out loud to yourself, as what you have written sounds different to just being read. Aaron  &bull; You Da  One 11:35, 22 June 2012 (UTC)