Talk:California Sunrise/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:33, 22 October 2020 (UTC)

Will start reviewing this today or tomorrow, depending on my schedule --K. Peake 12:33, 22 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change the genre in the infobox to Country, since that is directly stated but neotraditional country isn't, currently violating WP:STICKTOSOURCE
 * Separate producers using bullet points instead per Template:Infobox album
 * "American neotraditional country artist Jon Pardi, released on June 17, 2016 through" → "American country singer Jon Pardi. It was released on June 17, 2016. through" with the target
 * "of his 2014 debut effort Write You a Song," → "of his debut studio album, Write You a Song (2014),"
 * "more traditional aspects while" → "more traditional aspects of the genre while"
 * "Reviews for the record were positive, with critics praising Pardi's production" → "The album received positive reviews from music critics, who often praised the production" with the target
 * Start a new para after the critical reception sentence and that should begin with the singles sentence, though the rest of the info following the reception sentence should be in the same order outside of this while also being in the second para
 * "debuted at number one on the Top Country Albums chart and number 11 on the Billboard 200, giving Pardi his only number-one" → "debuted at number 11 on the US Billboard 200 and number one on the Top Country Albums chart, giving Pardi his only chart-topping" and this should be the second sentence of the para
 * "was certified platinum" → "was certified platinum in the United States"
 * "after moving..." remove this part
 * "It spawned five singles:" → "The accompanying singles"
 * "and "Night Shift"." → "and "Night Shift" were released."
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 03:31, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Background and development

 * "Jon Pardi released his debut album" → "Pardi released his debut studio album"
 * "reviews from critics who" → "reviews from critics, who"
 * "To promote the record, he spent the rest of the year" → "To promote the album, Pardi spent the rest of 2014"
 * "across North America and" maybe it should be the United States if he toured across there, but where are this and the talk shows part backed up?
 * "of his 2015 EP The B-Sides, 2011–2014," → "of his debut EP The B-Sides, 2011–2014 in 2015,"
 * Wikilink country music
 * "where he started performing" → "during which he started performing"
 * "band as Pardi wanted the feel" → "band, as Pardi wanted to create the feel"
 * "The album was co-produced by Bart Butler who" → "California Sunrise was co-produced by Bart Butler, who"
 * The release section should be moved to Singles and promotion as the first sentence; I will tell you to retitle that section later in this review
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 21:28, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Music and lyrics

 * "Opening track "Out of Style" was" → "The opening track "Out of Style" was"
 * Wikilink ode
 * "generations like Jesus and" → "generations, including Jesus and" with the wikilink
 * Target drums to Drum kit
 * "Beville Dunkerley of Rolling Stone noted how the song's underlying message is how" → "the song was noted by Beville Dunkerley of Rolling Stone for having the underlying message of how"
 * "through a modern sound" → "with a modern sound"
 * "various subgenres play throughout" → "various subgenres have played throughout"
 * "is described as Pardi" → "was described as Pardi"
 * Wikilink "Head Over Boots"
 * Target chorus to Refrain
 * Target "Night Shift" to Night Shift (Jon Pardi song)
 * "that the male narrator has" → "that a male worker has"
 * "man aware that he's leaving his former flame" → "man with awareness that he is better off leaving his former lover"
 * "her but finds it impossible to commit that promise." → "her, but finds it practically impossible to commit to doing so."
 * Wikilink "Dirt on My Boots"
 * Wikilink love song
 * "hip-hop" but fell" → "hip-hop," but fell" with the target
 * "to give it that country" → "alongside to give the song more of a country"
 * Wikilink "She Ain't in It"
 * "for Pardi to record it afterwards." → "for recording by Pardi afterwards."
 * Wikilink "Heartache on the Dance Floor"
 * "as Pardi and co-writers" → "that Pardi and co-writers"
 * "while also having" → "while they have"
 * "The closing title track was created" → "The closing title track on California Sunrise was created"
 * "shout-out that's about" → "shout-out for telling the story of"
 * "relationship", with a modern" → "relationship," aiming for it to be accompanied by a modern"
 * Target acoustic to Acoustic music
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Singles and promotion

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * Swap singles para to being the second para of this section instead
 * "The album's first single," → "The lead single from California Sunrise," with the wikilink
 * "released to country radio on" → "released to US country radio stations on"
 * "2015 and gave Pardi his first number-one country hit" → "2015, and gave Pardi his first number one hit"
 * "3x platinum by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) on" → "triple platinum by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) in the US on"
 * "Its music video was directed" → "An accompanying music video was directed" with the wikilink
 * "on Pardi's YouTube page" → "to Pardi's YouTube channel"
 * "A second single," → "The album's second single" with the target
 * "2016 and gave Pardi his second number-one country hit" → "2016, and gave Pardi his second number one hit"
 * "3x platinum by the RIAA on" → "triple platinum by the RIAA in the US on"
 * "released to country radio" → "released to US country radio stations"
 * "at numbers three and five on both the" → "at number three and five on the"
 * "It was also certified 2x platinum by the RIAA on" → "The song was certified double platinum by the RIAA in the US on
 * "2017 and reached numbers 21 and 23 on both the" → "2017, and reached number 21 and 23 on the"
 * "was directed by Jim Wright and" → "was directed by Wright and"
 * "2018 and peaked at numbers five and eight on both the" → "2018, and peaked at number five and eight on the"
 * "gold by the RIAA on" → "gold by the RIAA in the US on"
 * "was directed by Jim Wright" → "was directed by Wright"
 * "On October 3, he was announced" → "On October 3 of that year, Pardi was announced"
 * "Pardi was one of 26 opening acts that played" → "Pardi was revealed as one of 26 opening acts that would play"
 * "performing on May 11" → "with him performing on May 11"
 * "finishing on May 13 in" → "finishing on May 13, 2017 in"
 * "On March 14," → "On March 14 of that year,"
 * "he performed it" → "Pardi performed it"
 * "On May 25, " → "On May 25, 2017,"
 * "on October 7." → "on October 7, 2017."
 * "On August 2, he partnered with CMT" → "On August 2 of that year, Pardi partnered with CMT" with the target
 * "finishing on December 8" → "finishing on December 8, 2017"
 * "On September 28," → "On September 28, 2017"
 * "and wrapping up on October 26" → "and ending on October 26, 2018"
 * "On March 8, he" → "On March 8 of that year, Pardi"
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Reception

 * "garnered positive reviews from" → "was met with positive reviews from"
 * "that capture" → "on the album that capture"
 * "concluding that" → "concluding by writing:"
 * "noted how the record" → "noted how the album"
 * "tempos" that allow" → "tempos," which allow" with the wikilink
 * "with rhythms" and that" → "with rhythms," and that"
 * "and iconography used" → "and image present"
 * "concluding that" → "concluding that:"
 * Remove wikilink on Rolling Stone
 * "the album number 10" → "California Sunrise number 10"
 * "Rolling Stone writer Jon Freeman said the record" → "The magazine's writer Jon Freeman said the album"
 * "through a modern production, concluding that" → "through modern production, concluding that:"
 * "Uproxx writer Caitlin White said that" → "The website's writer Caitlin White said that"
 * "concluded by calling it" → "concluded by calling the album"
 * Remove target on Billboard
 * "from the album on" → "from California Sunrise on"
 * "at number eight and" → "at number eight, and"
 * "number ten." → "number 10." per MOS:NUM
 * "but it went to" → "ultimately losing to"
 * Add the release year of Stapleton's album in brackets
 * "number 11 on the" → "number 11 on the US"
 * "with first-week earnings of 29,000 equivalent album sales (24,000 in traditional album sales)." → "with first-week sales of 29,000 album-equivalent units, 24,000 of which were pure sales." with the wikilink
 * "It is Pardi's first number one record" → "It became Pardi's first number one album"
 * "it left the top 100" → "the album left the top 100"
 * "The album was certified" → "California Sunrise was certified"
 * "the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) on" → "the RIAA in the US on"
 * "in the US" → "in the country"
 * "with 1,076,000 units (including tracks and streams) consumed as of" → "and had sold 1,076,000 album-equivalent units by"
 * "it debuted at" → "the album debuted at"
 * "but left afterwards" remove that part
 * "peaked at number 51 the week" → "later peaked at number 51 on the week"
 * "2017 and stayed on the chart for twenty-two weeks." → "2017, and stayed on the chart for a total of 22 weeks."
 * "The album was certified" → "California Sunrise was certified"
 * "on January 11, 2019." → "in Canada on January 11, 2019."
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Track listing

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Why are no producers listed? Is it not known who produced which tracks?
 * Pardi → Jon Pardi on the first mention here only
 * Most country albums with two or more producers are usually assumed that they produced all of the tracks (i.e. Brett Eldredge's Sunday Drive and Pardi's Heartache Medication). DepressedPer (talk) 01:45, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Personnel

 * Adapted from the album's liner notes. → Credits adapted from the album's liner notes.
 * Wikilink Jon Pardi
 * Wikilink Ryan Gore
 * Target Hammond B-3 organ to Hammond organ
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Weekly charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Year-end charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * All of these years should be in separate tables, since that makes sortable less confusing even if it is tiring for them to be separated
 * Top Country Albums (Billboard) → US Top Country Albums (Billboard) on every listing
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Release history

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Format → Format(s)
 * Different formats should be separated using hlist instead
 * ✅ DepressedPer (talk) 17:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * since there are a number of issues but the article is not too large so they can be fixed within a week I believe; also, I did some copy editing for a few issues that were not pointed out directly here but had relevance to those mentioned! --K. Peake 13:24, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Good job, even though you forgot to mark references as done. ✅ time now! --K. Peake 06:05, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you! DepressedPer (talk) 11:32, 24 October 2020 (UTC)