Talk:Candyman (Christina Aguilera song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 02:44, 29 October 2013 (UTC)

Hey HD, I'll be glad to take this one, too. Sorry again for the wait you've had on several of these. Comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks as always for your work, -- Khazar2 (talk) 02:44, 29 October 2013 (UTC)

Okay, this looks fairly complete in terms of coverage, but as last time, there are some sticking points in the prose. You might consider putting in a request at the Guild of Copyeditors before your next submission; they're really good at cleaning stuff like this up. Anyway, I'll put this on hold for a week to give you a chance to address or respond to the points below. Thanks as always for all your work! -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:11, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

The sentence "Bill Lamp from About.com gave "Candyman" a four out of five stars rating, writing, "[With the song] Aguilera continues to demonstrate she is one of the top female artists in the business" and found out the sexual content in "Candyman" is particularly strange. And why "too sexual"? Were the critics all opposed to the song's sexual lyrics? "Fun and naughtiness" seems positive, for example.
 * "She described the first disc as "kind of a throwback with elements of jazz, blues and soul music combined with a modern-day twist, like hard-hitting beats"" -- so is Candyman on the first or second disc? This sounds like a good description of this song (the jazz part at least), but the description said her Perry collaborations were on the second.
 * "Perry and Aguilera revealed with MTV News that the song was inspired by The Andrews Sisters' 1941 hit "Boogie Woogie Bugle Boy".[5] It was also a tribute to The Andrews Sisters.[5]" -- this information has already been given; suggest cutting these sentences
 * The judgement that the song is a "classic" needs intext attribution to a critic
 * "found out the song's lyrics were too sexual" -- I'm not really clear what this means. Why "found out" (as in, they suddenly discovered?)?
 * "Lucy Davis for BBC Music chose "Candyman" and "I Got Trouble" are two old-school tracks" -- I don't understand this sentence
 * "John Montgomery for MTV News, on the other hand, was negative toward it, writing "though Aguilera's mostly going for glam here, she's also plenty bad, too, swinging her way into some servicemen's heart, coyly sipping on a milkshake and shaking it so hard your even your grandpa had to notice"" -- I think this source isn't being summarized correctly. Considering that he praises this as the best period of her career and incredibly sexy, it seems clear he means bad in a the opposite sense, like, or as in, "she's being a bad girl". From the source: "In fact, her baddest music videos also stand out as some of her very best ". So I don't think it's negative.
 * "In the "Pot o' Gold" season of the third season of American TV series," -- The season was called the Pot O Gold season?
 * Isn't it redundant to include a table for "Release history" when all of this information has already been given in text? I'd suggest cutting this. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:11, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

Since it's been a week without response, and some issues remain, I'm closing this review and not listing for GA at this time. I do hope someone will be able to pick it up from here and take it the rest of the way, though. Thanks to everybody who's worked on this one, Khazar2 (talk) 20:25, 5 November 2013 (UTC)