Talk:Cannon Street station/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:41, 15 August 2017 (UTC)

That's probably enough for now. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:14, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * " one of 19 stations" nineteen.
 * n-n-n-n-n-n-n-n-nineteen? Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "by Network Rail[5] and " three refs in the first three or so sentences, then no more for the rest of the lead, why not just move them all to the main body? Plus why such awkward ref placement?
 * There's an easy answer to this - I forgot to do it. (All the London station articles, or at least the ones I look at, had citations like this, presumably in response to an ancient fact tag). Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "Monument" is piped to a redirect.
 * Fixed Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * " site of the medieval steelyard," the or just "a"?
 * I'm going to go with "a" because of the context Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "the South Eastern Railway in " (a) grammar (b) dab.
 * Dab fixed, what's wrong with the grammar?
 * "City of London" is overlinked.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "London, Chatham & Dover Railway" and, not ampersand.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "for Continental services" why capitalised?
 * Fixed (confused with "Continental Europe" elsewhere) <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "The original hotel on the station..." about five run-ons in this one sentence...
 * Ye gods, that looks terrible! Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "itself occurred in" too passive.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "17" and "N15" piped to redirects.
 * I think this is because the articles were AfDed or redirected after the original text was put here - let me come back to this.
 * "South Eastern Railway" ditto.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "a 60 chains " "adj=on".
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "of London Bridge. " -> "of London Bridge station."
 * I think it's overlinked, fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * " J. W. Barry " piped to a redirect, no need for the hyphen, and why just John Wolfe Barry per the article?
 * Probably because that what the source had - fixed anyhow <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * " Wren-style " link.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Charing Cross is overlinked.
 * Fixed - these things normally happen when text is expanded above what was the first mention <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "The signalboxes outside the station were upgrading the following year" grammar.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "London and South Western Railway " not Southwestern.
 * Correct, the London and South Western Railway is what it was called and where our article is <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "3pm"->
 * Do we have a template for this? If not, why not? <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "to allow the Southern Railway " does "the" really belong here?
 * It sounds right. Ask <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk)  <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * It is right. Pick up any book concerning a pre-1948 railway of Britain, and you'll find that the definite article is universal. -- Red rose64 &#x1f339; (talk) 21:35, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Alright, alright, it was a question. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:26, 16 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "signal box" or "signalbox"?
 * Space, please <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "A high explosive also..." A high explosive what?
 * That's what the source says : "At Cannon Street a large number of incendiaries set light to the repaired roof, and a high explosive damaged the wall by No. 8 platform where a train and two engines were standing." <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Could link nationalistaion to History of rail transport in Great Britain 1948–1994?
 * Don't see why not <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "Southern Region of British Rail" -> "Southern Region of British Railways"
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "prime .. prime..." repetitive.
 * Tweaked <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "Modernisation Plan" is piped to a redirect, so it doesn't go to the desired section.
 * This has been round the houses a few times - fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "In 1974 the" comma.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "On 4 March 1976 a" ditto.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "On 15 February 1984 it " ditto.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Greenwich is piped to a redirect.
 * Fixed, although really the names of stations should all be consistent so that rws and stnlnk work as expected <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "£242,000 project. " other values have been given "today" inflated conversions.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Not sure we need a link for squash.
 * Playing Devil's advocate, I'm not sure squash is as well known worldwide compared to football or tennis, so I think giving the benefit of the doubt to the reader might be useful. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "from St Pauls" -> "from St Paul's"
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * " terminated at Charing Cross Station were" already previously linked, and not referred to as "Station", but if you insist, it should be "station".
 * Forgot this, fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * " the Greenwich Line as" line.
 * Fixed (there was a big song and dance on WT:UKRAIL about "Line" vs "line" which is best put to one side for this conversation....) <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "The Plumber's Apprentice" should be italics.
 * Done <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "Cannon Street station viewed from London Bridge." fragment, no full stop needed.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Define tph. Also would expect a space between the number and the abbreviation.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Link Woolwich Arsenal first time.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Ditto for Sidcup...
 * Fixed, later link removed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * " a bomb exploded " linked to IED, is that really the case?
 * Nope <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Notes need referencing.
 * Done as much as possible, except for the footnote in the infobox which has the citation hard-wired into the template. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * "Day & Reed 2008, pp. 25–256." really 231 pages to reference one sentence?
 * Nope, it's a typo for 255-256 (2 pages) <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * In the suc-box, "South Eastern Main Line" -> "South Eastern main line".
 * Done, though again I think this is a case where it was right for years and somebody moved it when nobody was looking. Probably. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * This is one of those controversial capitalise-or-not things that have been so prominent over the last year. -- Red rose64 &#x1f339; (talk) 21:35, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * All done, what else? <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  14:51, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Five times above, a phrase like "is piped to a redirect" is used. What is wrong with piping to a redirect? -- Red rose64 &#x1f339; (talk) 21:35, 15 August 2017 (UTC)

looks good, no issues with the amendments, thanks for the quick updates. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:28, 16 August 2017 (UTC)