Talk:Canopus-class battleship

Copyedit
Hi all

During the copyedit a few things came to light which may need looking at:
 * "Goliath served there again during 1909–1914, through the renaming of the Home Fleet as the Channel Fleet in 1914. HMS Albion and Glory went to the Channel Fleet prior to their Home Fleet service, 1905–1906, together with Canopus, 1906–1907." - This seems a little strange, the first sentence seems to say that the Home fleet was renamed to the Channel fleet in 1914, yet the second says that the ships went first to the Channel fleet prior to Home fleet service . How can this be? Either the Home Fleet was amalgamated into the Channel Fleet and so would make the first sentence correct, or the second sentence is incorrect and the dates of service refer to their Home Fleet service.
 * "from XXXX-XXXX". To use them in a phrase "served from XXXX-XXXX" would possibly be read to imply that service started during that time period (and continued after it), especially when talking about plurals. I realise that this is possibly controversial, but remembering that non-native English readers may be looking at this they may not understand the implied "from XXXX-XXXX" means "from XXXX to XXXX". I have changed to "during" and "in". It might be easier to use (XXXX-XXXX) as this would remove the need for a clarifying "in", "during" or "from". I also notice that many of the later sections on the individual ships do not use the qualifier.

Chaosdruid (talk) 04:48, 24 February 2011 (UTC)