Talk:Capture of Grenada (1779)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 15:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)

I'll start this review shortly. Interesting topic! MathewTownsend (talk) 15:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Review


 * Lede
 * "French forces were reembarked on the fleet" - I guess these is military terminology but I'm not sure what it means
 * "Embarkation" is a fairly well-defined concept independent of military uses...  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Background
 * "augmenting the fleet of Admiral Samuel Barrington" - so he was already there? (I must have missed that.)
 * The Royal Navy had more-or-less permanent stations in the West Indies. I didn't think any specific reference this (or the arrival of its most recent commander) was particularly necessary.  I've added words mentioning Barrington's post.  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "the French at Martinique" - on Martinique? Fixed  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "Governor the marquis de Bouillé" - looks funny. Should it be Governer François Claude Amour?
 * Nobles are generally referred to by their title, so your suggestion would be wrong (or at least bad form). I've rephrased to make it less awkward.  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)


 * French capture
 * "called for three columns to attack the back side of the fortifications with the bayonet" - with bayonets? Fixed  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Aftermath
 * What is the significant of John Paul Jones attending the performance?
 * Nothing particularly significant, but I thought it an interesting bit of color.  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "In order to better defend against a similar attack to the one they launched" - I don't quite understand this sentence - maybe it's me. Rephrased  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "The divisions in Grenadian society" - social divisions? military divisions? Clarified  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Caption
 * "French political cartoon depicting acclamation of d'Estaing for his successes on Grenada and against Byron "- sounds funny. Rephrased  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Everything else looks fine. A very clear, concise article.


 * I made a few copy edits that you are free to reverse.

MathewTownsend (talk) 21:04, 20 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Thank you for taking the time to review; I think I've addressed your concerns. Let me know if not...  Magic ♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

MathewTownsend (talk) 17:03, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
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