Talk:Capture of Wurst Farm/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 03:28, 1 July 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:28, 1 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Sorry for taking so long to get to this.
 * No DABs, external links OK
 * Images properly licensed.
 * Needs some photos of combatants
 * Looking--Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 17:41, 16 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Can you modify the detailed maps to show the front line at the time? Don't know how
 * Lede a bit too detailed. Shorten it to 2 paras or so.
 * Who's Fifth Army? Link it as well.✅
 * Tell the reader that the 4th Army is German, and move its link there.✅
 * at the front of the main zone had fallen since the Battle of Pilckem Ridge Awkward, passive writing. It hadn't been given away; it "had been captured".
 * Briefly explain about the function of Eingrief divisions.✅
 * Lossberg the 4th Army Chief of Staff, comma after Lossberg. ✅
 * If you're going to red link something, do it at first use. And make sure that all links are at first use.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:17, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Awkward: The Fifth Army made several minor attacks in September with little success and were suspended but smaller local operations continued.✅
 * Before the main attack, the 58th Trench Mortar Battery fired twenty shots at a pillbox and had ten hits. significance?✅
 * What the regiment of the 2nd/4th London Battalion? and 2/6 Rifles?✅
 * Platoons and sections had all been given geographical objectives, such as pillboxes and emplacements; as they were outflanked the occupants surrendered and 301 Germans were taken prisoner. Rephrase to something like that 301 German defenders surrendered as their defensive works were outflanked.✅
 * What's an outpost group?✅
 * 59th (2nd North Midland) Division (59th Division) Typo, I presume? No, abbreviation clarifiedKeith-264 (talk) 06:37, 21 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Not sure if the summary of Polygon Wood is necessary.
 * Move the note about Chinese attacks right after that phrase where a reader will immediately see it. I missed it on my first read through.✅--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:17, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Bracketed it instead of notingKeith-264 (talk) 07:06, 21 July 2015 (UTC)

Some comments
I just wanted to add a few comments. Not sure if they are useful / necessary at this point. Hamish59 (talk) 10:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)
 * In the infobox, German Commander is Erich Ludendorff. Would the 36th Division / Corps / 4th Army commander be more appropriate?
 * In infobox, German causalties "up to 50 percent". 50% of what?  What sort of numbers?
 * 55th (West Lancashire) Infantry Division should be 55th (West Lancashire) Division for consistency with 51st (Highland) Division and 58th (2/1st London) Division
 * Would linking to Fritz von Lossberg be worthwhile?
 * Winnipeg / Winnipeg cross-roads / Winnipeg crossroads needs consistency.
 * What is Springfield?
 * On battalions of the London Regiment
 * 2nd/4th Battalion London Regiment should be 2/4th Battalion, London Regiment
 * Need to correct 2/5th London Rifle Brigade - not part of the Rifle Brigade. Should be 5th (City of London) Battalion, London Regiment (London Rifle Brigade) in full, so 2/5th Battalion, London Regiment (London Rifle Brigade) or 2/5th London Rifle Brigade
 * 2/6th Rifle Brigade wrong. Should be 6th (City of London) Battalion, London Regiment (City of London Rifles) in full, so perhaps 2/6th City of London Rifles or 2/6th London Regiment (City of London Rifles)
 * Need to pick a consistent format to designate the battalions
 * Over linking to Post Office Rifles
 * Linking 1st Tank Brigade to Royal Tank Regiment is not correct, I think. How about Royal Tank Regiment or 5th Royal Tank Regiment .  I guess we need a 1st Tank Brigade article or something similar at some point.  Surprised we do not have one yet - surely the world's first armoured formation?
 * 26 September section: need link to Second Army? Ditto 3rd Division.
 * The 58th Division had 1,236 casualties seems odd to my eyes. The 58th Division suffered 1,236 casualties perhaps?