Talk:Carbon, Alberta

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This page needs to be more objective. Also remove generalized statements to be more specific.

"Nestled in the Kneehill Creek Valley, this small community has much to offer its residents and visitors." Be specific

"Recreational facilities, unique shopping opportunities, friendly people - it's all here." How can it all be here if you say people are going to Three Hills and Drumheller? What are the rec facilities? shopping? etc.

Carbon is a clean picturesque village with paved, quiet streets lined with trees.

An abundance of services -- be specific. What are they?

What are the features that benefit retirement? Are there retirement homes? Hospitals? Care centers?

starting a business -- what kind of property available for business?

raising a family -- Schools? parks? playgrounds? daycares?

The Carbon district has a very colorful and interesting history. -- What is the history? Including it would be valuable for this page.

Economy -- why is this word isolated by itself?

Equipped with all the necessities, Carbon is proud to offer a grocery store, three restaurants, two banks, three churches, a hotel, a hair salon, an insurance agency, a convenience store, a laundromat, and much, much, much more. -- Avoid the expression "much, much, much more" because it is not specific. Cadillac 23:15, 6 March 2006 (UTC)


 * Is this really something to be proud of?
 * Equipped with all the necessities, Carbon is proud to offer a grocery store, three restaurants, two banks, three churches, a hotel, a hair salon, an insurance agency, a convenience store, a laundromat.


 * I chopped some more that was trivia and non-encyclopedic tone. — Preceding unsigned comment added by RJFJR (talk • contribs) 17:46, 9 July 2006 (UTC)