Talk:Carla Ching

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Td.gec. Peer reviewers: Hyennah.

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Looks great! See if you can get some of her plays through the library (you may need to use Inter-Library Loan). Thea365Instructor (talk) 16:19, 26 April 2018 (UTC)

This is excellent work, although maybe not all of it belongs in the lead. As you keep working on the article where everything fits should make more sense. Giving some insight into her playwrighting will help make this article more notable. Thea365Instructor (talk) 23:13, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Rachel's Peer Review: I like all the background information but I'm not sure that I would start with it in the lead paragraph. You want to make sure that even if someone only reads the first two lines of your article they understand who your person is. Having a strong lead should make them want to learn more and then they can read the background information. I really like the second paragraph of your lead! Instead of saying that "Carla discontinued her life in the theater for her college career" I would say something along the lines of "she put it on hold or "she took a break." Otherwise, it is confusing that she later comes back to it. Even if you want to say something about how she never intended to continue, I would not say that she ended or discontinued it. Her "full length plats"-- what is a plat? Is this a typo? I would not put the "life in California" section in between the list of full plays and one act plays. I think all the plays should be listed in the same general area. I would put it at the end right before the teaching section. The list of one act plays seems awkward. I would either just list it as a sentence in the "playwrighting/ plays" section and just separate each play with commas or I would add more information under each one. Possibly put it in a table and add information about where the plays have been performed or when they were published? Overall great job! Your article is really coming along:) ≈≈≈≈Rachel

Hannah's peer review
It's looking really good for the most part! One suggestion is maybe changing the structure of the article a little, because I personally thought it would be more natural to talk about her life first and include her plays as a list at the end for the sake of the flow of the article. I think you tried to put things in a chronological order but since there are so many plays I think it might hinder the flow of the article if it's in between different sections. Another thing I noticed was the citation - I think a lot of your citations came from the same source, and I'm not sure if you're aware of this but if you have multiple information from the same source you can reuse the citations! So instead of having 1,2,3,4,5, you can have 1a,b,c,d,e (does that make sense?) so you don't end up with 50 citations with the exact same source. Other than this I think the article's looking really good with a lot of content and information with a neutral tone! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hyennah (talk • contribs) 18:36, 17 May 2018 (UTC)