Talk:Carrie A. Tuggle

Problems

 * " It was the first school in Birmingham in which black men and women were co-helpers.[1][2]" Not in the sources, and (less importantly) not in the body of the text, where everything from the lead should be repeated and expanded.


 * Changed the sentence and added a reference.
 * "In Birmingham, Tuggle held the position of Alabama Order of Calanhe from 1891 to 1899". There is no position of that name. The Alabama Order of Calanthe (not Calanhe) is an organization, and Carrie Tuggle was its Grand Worthy Counsellor from 1899 to 1901. You source this as well to which has nothing even remotely resembling this, and this which is the right source but has no information on what her role was in 1891, so no idea where you got that from.


 * I have fixed the reference for her role in 1899 to 1901
 * "In Birmingham, Tuggle held the position of Grand Worthy Worthy Councilor from 1891 to 1899." You miswrote the role (and it wasn't for Birmingham but for the whole of Alabama) and didn't change the years. "She moved to Birmingham in the early 1900s and was there the Worthy Councellor from 1891 on" is what your article now claims, which is wrong at face value and wrong in reality. The next sentence states "In 1901, she was appointed to the Office of the Supreme Worthy Councilor after her husband had refused to contest for the post." which also isn't supported by your source at all. Furthermore, without any context, those two sentences will be incomprehensible to most readers. Fram (talk) 08:18, 26 February 2016 (UTC)
 * "She also sought support from the philanthropists of Birmingham’s White Community Members of the Club" No source seems to discuss this "White Community Members of the Club", and the source has no indication of what this Club is supposed to be.


 * Corrected now.
 * " financial backing from Louis Pitz and his wife and A. B. Loveman.": that's Louis Pizitz (not Pitz), founder of Pizitz.


 * Corrected
 * "Armstrong did much towards the cause of women's suffrage in Jefferson County, " Armstrong?
 * Changed the name to Carrie A. Tuggle

And so on... The article is on the other hand rather incomplete, e.g. the fact that she created and edited a newspaper (the Birmingham Truth) between 1902 and 1910 is not mentioned at all. Or the fact that she wasn't only African-American: her father was one of the last chiefs of the Mohawks.this and other sources. Fram (talk) 12:57, 25 February 2016 (UTC)


 * Apart from compliance on all above observations, I have also added a few sentences on her role as an editor and on the funding provided for expansion of the school complex, with an additional reference.  Nvvchar . 06:53, 26 February 2016 (UTC)