Talk:Case deBruijn/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 18:41, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll do this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 18:41, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Lead

 * The first sentence is a lot to handle. Maybe just end it after placekicker and then say He played on game...

Early life and education

 * When young, his family moved to a suburban community in Washington, I know this is silly, but you probably need to mention that he moved to America. his family moved to America, settling down in a suburban...
 * 1982 NFL Draft, only behind Rohn Stark you can delete, only

Professional career

 * Was he a one-step kicker, or a three-step kicker? Can you clarify.
 * , who they had just released in favor of deBruijn a week prior repetitive to the sentence earlier. Can just delete.
 * He felt confident in camp, saying "I felt that I was going to have a chance. the repetition of "felt" isn't great. Maybe just He was confident
 * as part of the roster cuts either just "roster cuts" or "their roster cuts"

Later life

 * Maybe tack on the mining company before Newmont.