Talk:Cavalera Conspiracy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: maclean (talk) 17:35, 24 October 2009 (UTC) ~
 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * Notes
 * 2 images, both Creative Commons
 * In "Name", but he "couldn't resist doing the song with Igor." - is this quote necessary? Quotes should be used when the quote adds something extra (Quotations). Otherwise we should just use our own words, like "he wanted to do the song with Igor".
 * I removed the quote, and rewrote the sentence as you suggested.--  C  anniba loki  13:12, 25 October 2009 (UTC)
 * In "Inflikted", Special guests include bassist Rex Brown and Max's stepson Ritchie Cavalera. - do you know what Ritchie Cavalera did for the album? What makes them "special"?
 * Ritchie Cavalera sang in a track. I removed the word "special," it was not a good choice to be used in that context.--  C  anniba loki  13:12, 25 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Date formatting, "August 16, 1996" v "25 March 2008" - the rest of the article switches between full date formats. Per WP:MOSDATE, "Dates in article body text should all have the same format."
 * In "Inflikted", "they were considered an "inappropriate" band" - who considered them 'inappropriate'? or, who is this quote "inappropriate" being attributed to? And what specifically about them (or their act?) was 'inappropriate'?
 * I provided the attribution here and removed the passive voice quote by Max Cavalera. The passive voice allows the writer to avoid attributing responsibility for the verb ('deemed') to anybody. The stuff.co.nz source did not say the band was "inflammatory" or "banned". stuff.co.nz reported that a statement on the band's website by Max Cavalera claims that someone somewhere called them "inflammatory" and "inappropriate" and that Max Cavalera attributed that to somebody somewhere cancelling their shows on them, and that Max Cavalera equates that being "banned".  --maclean (talk) 23:59, 25 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Well done, well done...--  C  anniba loki  03:26, 26 October 2009 (UTC)
 * In "Inflikted", "...and have been forced to cancel their appearances..." - this is a strong statement. Who "forced" them? Is "have been" the correct tense?
 * Can the last sentence in "Inflikted" be updated? "On 27 June 2009, the band announced new tour dates..." (e.g. "announced" → "performed at", and could you provide a location indicator like US? Euro? where?)
 * On Broadness (Criteria 3a), the lead seems to have some details missing from the article. What is this about Brazil and France ? What does Nailbomb have to do with anything? Groove metal?
 * Max and Igor are Brazilians. Nailbomb was a side project by Max and another guy, where Igor collaborated playing drums. See the field "Associated_acts" at Template:Infobox_musical_artist. Explained.--  C  anniba loki  03:10, 26 October 2009 (UTC)
 * I don't think the Brazil thing is important enough for the first sentence, especially since it isn't mentioned in the body and (from what I've read) doesn't seem important to the subject (Cavalera Conspiracy, opposed to its 2 of its members). I would change the first sentence to something more defining of the band as a whole like "Cavalera Conspiracy is a heavy metal supergroup that released one album, Inflikted. --maclean (talk) 03:58, 26 October 2009 (UTC)
 * I need to explain, at least, from what country they are. I removed the countries links per WP:OVERLINK.--  C  anniba loki  04:26, 26 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Rewritten.--  C  anniba loki  02:01, 27 October 2009 (UTC)
 * OK. -maclean (talk) 19:51, 27 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks!--  C  anniba loki  20:17, 27 October 2009 (UTC)