Talk:Cecile Hoover Edwards

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Why isn't the image showing up? Yoninah (talk) 13:45, 1 November 2015 (UTC)

More info. about the outcomes of her research
This article really piqued my interest when I saw it on the front page, but after reading it I'm left wondering about the results of Edwards' research. What discoveries did she make? Who followed in her footsteps, and did their findings support or dispute her findings? I don't know if the answers of all of my questions fall completely within the scope of this article. I was just throwing out things I'm interested in, that you might consider adding. Have a good day! :) Bobnorwal (talk) 23:25, 1 November 2015 (UTC)

Editing Article
Hi all, considering the general shortness of this page, I plan to expand on it. I have minor additions to make concerning her academic career, but the bulk of my updates involve her research. I've been reading several of Edwards' published works, and I want to make some of her findings available on this page. She published a study about her research with methionine in adult rats; I want to write about the experiment as well as the results. Additionally, another study she published was about the diet of adult males, which I found had interesting implications, considering that certain geographic regions have diets that are heavily based from one food source. I will describe the premise, experiment and conclusions drawn from that paper. And thirdly, Edwards submitted a review to Howard University, in which she delved into environmental/lifestyle factors that affect hypertension rates in African Americans, in the same way that diet does. In this paper, she covered dietary factors, social barriers, and environmental risk factors that contribute to the African American hypertension rate that is higher than that of White Americans. The following three sources are the publications that I spoke of. Please let me know if you have suggestions and/or concerns about what I've just written.

SNur (talk) 07:14, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
 * PEER REVIEW
 * Hi,
 * I thoroughly enjoyed reading this article! I just have a few suggestions to improve the flow of the article:
 * 1. I think it would be helpful to have an Award Section where all of her awards are listed chronologically - usually this is often put in a table form but i think as long as it is listed in years, it would be great!
 * 2. Regarding her research, would it be possible for different research topics to be listed under separate subsections? This would ensure that the readers can follow through and it would also be easier to see the bigger picture of her scientific carrier. Under these subsections, if there are sufficient details you might want to expand a little more on hypothesis, experimental approach and conclusion. This would provide so much more insight into her studies and her scientific focus.
 * That is all I have for now! Hope it helps and keep up the great work!
 * Nphi (talk) 23:14, 19 November 2016 (UTC)nphi

PEER REVIEW #2  Hello SNur! I just finished reviewing your article and I think you did an incredible job on emphasizing Cecile Hoover’s life as a scientist! I have done some minor edits on your page, mainly punctuation errors. Below, are just some of my opinions on how you can improve on your Wiki edits.

In the second paragraph of your article, you wrote that Cecile was “cited by the National Council of Negro Women for outstanding contributions to science.” Was there a specific contribution that she made which gave her such recognition? If so, I humbly think it is an important point to make. If her recognition was based on her overall science contributions, then it should be fine.

Under the “Research” headline, I believe you should start with “Edwards’s career” instead of the pronoun “her” just for more clarification. I like how you wrote about her many research projects, but it would be nice to see a bit more organization in this area. An idea would be to include subheaders in order to group the different areas of her research. In addition, your third paragraph under “Research” links the word “methionine,” but you have already linked that same word towards the beginning of the article. Also, the sentence “In addition, Edwards was interested in postoperative dieting, due to the loss of tissue protein that is observed during surgeries” seems a bit out of place for this paragraph since it does not relate to methionine or its effects, but since I do not know about her research, I will let you decide. Lastly, in the fourth paragraph under “Research,” you wrote about pica. It was a great that you linked the word, but I think it would be nice if you gave the reader some words on what it is (such as pica, a ______ disorder).

My last suggestion is for the “Personal” headline. Maybe you should rewrite it to say “Personal Life”? Although your main goal was to write about Cecile’s scientific achievements and not about her personal life, it would be nice to add more details to this section. However, I understand that this information might be difficult to find. Nevertheless, good job on your first wiki edit! Mmreynoso (talk) 06:21, 22 November 2016 (UTC)Mmreynoso