Talk:Celtic influences on Tolkien/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 16:40, 18 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:31, 18 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Link Celtic.
 * Done.


 * Welsh is linked at second mention.
 * Fixed.


 * "constructed Elvish language" Link Elvish.
 * Done.


 * "Tolkien's Middle-earth including" probably needs a comma.
 * Repunctuated sentence.


 * "That was a complex pleasure" I'm unsure what exactly "that" is referring to here.
 * Edited.


 * "Literary Welsh" You could link the whole term instead of just the first word.
 * Done.


 * "Common Eldarin" Any applicable links here?
 * Added link in sentence.


 * "here in a 1910 illustration" maybe better as "shown here in a 1910 illustration"?
 * Done.


 * "Melkor" A gloss that quickly explains who this is would be helpful.
 * Added.


 * "invaded Ireland...burning their...fighting a..." You start the sentence in the past tense and switch to present halfway through. It's mythology, so past would be better.
 * Checked; it's grammatically correct.


 * "Uttermost West including" Comma
 * Added.


 * "is "so far" Undying Lands is plural, so should be "are"
 * Fixed.


 * "and Balor...glass" This clause does not make sense taken together with the part before the semicolon.
 * Rearranged sentence.


 * "The Sword in the Stone is broken" This sounds out of place, looks like it's missing the parallel of Narsil breaking.
 * Tweaked.


 * "the sword remade" Comma.
 * "the sword remade as Andúril" is a thing.


 * The images are all licensed and used correctly.
 * Noted.


 * The sources are all reliable and formatted correctly.
 * Noted.


 * Spotchecks:
 * Hall, Mark R. (2012). "Gandalf and Merlin, Aragorn and Arthur: Tolkien's Transmogrification of the Arthurian Tradition and Its Use as a Palimpsest for The Lord of the Rings". Inklings Forever: Published Colloquium Proceedings 1997-2016. Verifies all claims made.
 * Whetter, K. S.; McDonald, R. Andrew (2006). ""In the Hilt is Fame": Resonances of Medieval Swords and Sword- lore in J.R.R. Tolkien's The Hobbit and The Lord of the Rings". Mythlore. Verifies all claims made.
 * Heritage, Stuart (5 September 2022). "The backlash to rule them all? Every controversy about The Rings of Power so far". The Guardian. Verifies all claims made.
 * Noted.


 * That's all I have. AryKun (talk) 13:51, 26 July 2023 (UTC)
 * All done to date. Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:13, 26 July 2023 (UTC)


 * All right, no more issues I can see, will be passing. AryKun (talk) 09:26, 27 July 2023 (UTC)