Talk:Cemetery of San Fernando/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:15, 3 May 2021 (UTC)


 * @The Rambling Man Thank you for taking your time to review this article, if you have any question please ping me over here. CommanderWaterford (talk) 11:24, 3 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's about a third of the way through. I'm afraid this is in desperate need of a copyedit by a native English speaker, and preferably someone who knows about this kind of subject. I note there are plenty of unreferenced claims in the material I'm yet to review and I'm troubled by the fact this clearly hasn't been read through with so many issues (especially like the numbers appearing after full stops sporadically). I am reluctant to quick-fail but unless I see a vast improvement of the whole article, not just the portion I've reviewed, then I will have no option. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 12:33, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "It has an area of 28 hectares (69 acres).[1]" could be merged with the previous sentence.
 * "floor plan is in the shape of a pyramid" how can a floor plan be the shape of a 3-dimensional object? Do you really mean triangle?
 * "800-metre straight" and others, convert to Imperial units.
 * "from the crucified to the next" what does that mean?
 * "The long road is crossed by parallel streets. " I don't know which long road to which this refers, perhaps also it's "crossed by a number of streets running parallel to one another".
 * There's a whole lot of the lead dedicated to the plan of the cemetery and the roads and their names, but not much about the cemetery itself.
 * What are "niche blocks"?
 * "Main entrance Cementerio de San Fernando" needs to be written in English.
 * "Burial joselito" what does that mean? What am I actually looking at here?
 * "middle and upper classes to be buried" context, i.e. is this the global perspective, Europe, Spain, Seville... which one?
 * "1609 Constitutions of the Archbishopric" what was that?
 * "inside the temples in" which "the temples"??
 * "near the population, which was overcrowded inside the walls" needs copyediting.
 * "overcrowded inside the walls" what walls?"
 * "although there were some cemeteries in the outskirts of the city" unreferenced.
 * "enlightened Pablo de Olavide" who said he was "enlightened"?
 * "undertaking one with these characteristics" needs copyedit.
 * "epidemic in the city that killed some 14,000 people.56 This" of what? and what is that 56?
 * "north of the city." unref.
 * "of San Sebastian" the diacritic has gone missing.
 * "the plague epidemics" links?
 * "in 1728.8" what's the 8? Are these sentences copied and pasted from other sites with references?
 * "the Brotherhood of San Sebastian" what was that?
 * "from the burials.8 " same again.
 * "the cathedral chapter" who or what is that?
 * "to do something similar" not encyclopedic tone.
 * "and in the end" too familiar, not encyclopedic tone.
 * "rented for 7 years" seven. And what happened after that elapsed?
 * "The saturation of bodies" do you mean there were too many bodies or something else?
 * "in the 1850s.13" same again.
 * "in 1885.[6][2]" ref order.


 * @The Rambling Man Thanks for your time, that was one of my very first ones (almost forgotten honestly) and indeed it seem to need a CE, I will raise a request. CommanderWaterford (talk) 12:43, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * I suggest this nomination is withdrawn until it's ready for renomination. Peer review can take quite a while. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 13:56, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * @The Rambling Man I am in contact with a Guild CE if he finds time the next 2-3 days, I am waiting for a response. If he does not find time this week I will withdraw it for sure. CommanderWaterford (talk) 19:09, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * @Novem Linguae agreed to do a CE this week, so please let it be on hold so far. CommanderWaterford (talk) 08:00, 4 May 2021 (UTC)
 * ok, it's been a week now, what's the progress here? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 12:22, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
 * @The Rambling Man ? As far as I see you already put this on failed some days ago so there has been no rush for us to make any progress, the article needs indeed a lot of work before getting it to GA Status. CommanderWaterford (talk) 12:24, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
 * not at all. You told me it was on hold.  I didn't fail it.  Please check this. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 12:28, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
 * @The Rambling Man Interesting because I received from Legobot a failed Message (which I already archived). Anyway - right now this article cannot being treated as GA at all, unfortunately. CommanderWaterford (talk) 15:35, 11 May 2021 (UTC)
 * That is strange. It's now (correctly) failed.  Do not remove the GAN template without replacing it with a pass/fail template please. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 16:50, 11 May 2021 (UTC)