Talk:Chair Model/GA1

GA Review
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Back for more, eh? Okay, here we go:


 * "releationship"
 * I don't think it's a good idea to start a sentence with "Then". Perhaps "Then "Parking" was going to be the title," &rarr; "Later, "Parking" was considered for the title," – this sounds better. This sentence doesn't read nearly as well as the rest of the article.
 * "Jennifer Celotta and Paul Lieberstein were actually the ones" – why "actually"? Is this in comparison to who we thought were the ones?

Gary King ( talk ) 16:12, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   16:18, 7 July 2008 (UTC)


 * The quotes need to be paid attention to.


 * "a sweet and genuine moment."" &rarr; "a sweet and genuine moment"."
 * ""a hysterical turn and highlights just how deluded Michael – and Dwight – can be."" &rarr; ""a hysterical turn and highlights just how deluded Michael – and Dwight – can be"."

Gary King ( talk ) 16:37, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   16:42, 7 July 2008 (UTC)

"External links" goes after "References". I did this, so I will pass now. Gary King ( talk ) 16:55, 7 July 2008 (UTC)