Talk:Chamber pop/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:55, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * (or ork-pop) → (also referred to as ork-pop)
 * but without irony or kitsch → without containing irony or kitsch

Definition and roots

 * 1966 album → 1966 studio album
 * summarizes: "think → summarizes; "think
 * (no relation) → this is overfluous and can be thus be removed
 * He may be confused with Carl Wilson, who is Brian's brother and Beach Boy bandmate.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)


 * that was labelled chamber pop → that approached chamber pop
 * I think this would be distorting the source, which is talking about the term "chamber pop", not the style.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)


 * explained: "When → explained; "When
 * mystery ... → mystery [...]
 * "ork-pop" (says Chris Holmes of the band Yum-Yum) → "ork-pop", according to Chris Holmes of band Yum-Yum (unlink redlink)
 * I believe an article could be made about the group (WP:REDYES).--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)


 * music file > lead vocal → lead vocals

Emergence and popularity

 * O'Hagan commented: → O'Hagan commented;
 * there. ... → there. [...]
 * in their arrangements → who is 'they'?
 * wrote: "Bored → wrote; "Bored
 * popsmiths ... [are on] → popsmiths [...] [are on]
 * pop masterpiece. ... → pop masterpiece. [...]
 * these acts ... → these acts [...]
 * Most ork-pop musicians → The majority of the ork-pop musicians
 * of the music retailer → "the" is overfluous
 * Witch Hazel → redlink; fix
 * As above.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)


 * as the duo → for duo
 * debut album: "in → debut album; "in
 * answered: "I → answered; "I
 * change. ... I → change. [...] I

Outcome

 * I've put this for 7 days in order to allow edits on this article. Good job! Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:24, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Done!--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:07, 2 November 2016 (UTC)