Talk:Change (Taylor Swift song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CallMe Nathan   &bull;  Talk2Me   06:51, 15 April 2011 (UTC)

Lead

 * singer-songwriter -> link
 * Done.
 * The first 3-4 sentences read a little stop and go and choppy. Try and merge them a bit so they flow better
 * Done.
 * It received mixed reviews -> from music critics
 * Done.
 * achieved positive commercial outcomes - re-write. Also, the song didn't exactly perform well
 * Done.
 * Swift performing with a band -> anything else?
 * Done.

Background

 * Pretty nice. Not going to attack you on this one :D

Composition

 * Swift's vocals, Swift's vocals
 * Done.

Reception

 * generally positive to mixed -> we have 1 negative review and 1 mixed. Its safe to say mixed period
 * Done.
 * peak at number ten -> peak position of number 10
 * Changed to "peak position of", but I really don't want to use numbers. "Tim McGraw", "Our Song", "Love Story", "White Horse", and multiple others do not use numbers and I think it'd be best to keep cohesive. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 15:48, 24 April 2011 (UTC)
 * making Swift's -> it
 * Done.

Music video

 * That long sentence is a bit run-on. Try cutting it down or separating it
 * Done.
 * As the video progresses, Swift is seeing singing and dancing -> try and incorporating this into another sentence
 * I don't think it can be incorporated into another sentence. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 15:52, 24 April 2011 (UTC)

Live performances

 * Swift has performed the track on the AOL Sessions, -> none of these small sentences. Also, it needs a period
 * Done.
 * Since, Swift
 * Done.
 * sang suspended from the crowd on an elevator -> re-write
 * Done.
 * She then came down, where she was joined by a teenage choir. Swift finished the performance by surfing the crowd -> again, connect
 * Done.
 * She noted, "It's been a tough year." And -> comma, not period
 * Done.
 * Let me know when its all fixed. Again, sorry for the delay. Nice job :)-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   09:15, 24 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Your fixes have been sufficient. Good job. Now GA.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   04:45, 25 April 2011 (UTC)