Talk:Changsha Kingdom/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 16:27, 11 January 2020 (UTC)

Reading now … --Jens Lallensack (talk) 16:27, 11 January 2020 (UTC)


 * The kingdom was founded when Emperor Gaozu granted the territory to Wu Rui, one of his main followers, around the same time as the establishment of the Han dynasty. – I would add here the date (e.g., "around 203/202 BC") as this is a central information for the lead.


 * most notably Mawangdui, the tomb of Changsha's chancellor Li Cang and his family – this information of the lead is not repeated in the body of the article. I suggest to add a sentence introducing this important site to the main text.
 * ✅. It may be a little difficult go too much into the details about the site since information from Mawangdui covers all the aspects. I've added a sentence at the culture section as Mawangdui is mentioned multiple times there.


 * His army then followed the Han leader Liu Bang – it is unclear to whom "His" is referring to. Xiang Yu or Wu Rui?
 * ✅, changed it to "Rui".


 * In 178 BC, the kingdom passed to his son Wu Zhu – to whom is "his" referring to? Zhao Tuo?
 * ✅, changed it to "Wu You".


 * Wu Zhu reigned for 21 years, dying in 157 BC without male issue. – this sentence needs a citation


 * Western Han dynasty – does that mean that the empire was splitted in a western and eastern half? I suggest to add brief background information in the appropriate place in the "History" section, as this would help readers not familiar with the history of the Han dynasty.
 * ✅, briefly explained the situation in the late Western Han – Eastern Han period.


 * provide us important evidence about the concept of meridian channels in its infancy – I suggest to remove the "us", to follow Wikipedia writing style.


 * This is a fine article, I only have some minor quibbles. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:33, 14 January 2020 (UTC)
 * . Thank you for the review.:) I've worked on all the problems here. Esiymbro (talk) 14:40, 16 January 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the fixes. Looks good. Promoting now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:57, 17 January 2020 (UTC)