Talk:Chantelle Cameron/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:39, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Going to be reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 14:39, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "having held the WBC female light-welterweight title since October 2020 and the IBO female lightweight title from 2017 to 2019." - repetition of "title"
 * This follows the examples given in MOS:BOXING/LEAD
 * "and bronze in the lightweight division at the 2011 EU Championships in Katowice, Poland, losing to Katie Taylor in the semi-finals." - and a bronze ✅
 * "losing to Katie Taylor in the semi-finals." - to Ireland's Katie Taylor ✅
 * "As of October 2020, she is ranked as the world's best active female light-welterweight by BoxRec[5] and third by The Ring, as well as the third best active female lightweight by The Ring.[6]" - all this information should be mentioned in the main prose and references in the lead are discouraged per MOS:CITELEAD
 * This follows MOS:BOXING/LEAD. The rankings can change from week to week so there's not really a place for it in the prose. – 2 . O . Boxing  20:29, 10 November 2020 (UTC)

Early life

 * "She credits her love for combat sports to watching movies" - more formal; films ✅
 * "and hit television show Buffy the Vampire Slayer," - the television programme ✅
 * "stating; "I loved all those fighting films. Kickboxer would have to be my favourite Van Damme film. The fighting in it is unreal. I loved Buffy because of the fight scenes and the fact she was a female role model." - a full colon is preferred in place of the text in bold ✅
 * Wikilink combat sports
 * Already linked in the second sentence of the section. – 2 . O . Boxing  20:29, 10 November 2020 (UTC)

Amateur career

 * "the ABA Championships in 2010[12] and the ABAE Championships in 2015.[13]" - a comma is needed after the year "2010" but before the first citation in this portion of text ✅

Super-featherweight

 * "After scoring technical knockout (TKO) wins over Bojana Libiszewska[21] and Bilitis Gaucher[22] in July and October respectively," - the citations can go at the end of this portion of text ✅

IBO lightweight champion

 * "before making the second defence of her title against Jessica Gonzalez on 13 October at the York Hall in London, with the vacant WBC Silver female lightweight title also on the line." - repetition of "title" ✅
 * Wikilink jab ✅
 * Wikilink slip to Slipping
 * It's not the same Slipping. Slip as in "oopsy daisy, I slipped".
 * "in what was a controlled performance from start to finish," - needs to be rewritten so that it is more formal ✅
 * "Cameron announced her split with Cyclone Promotions and trainer Shane McGuigan via Twitter," - she had left Cyclone Promotions and trainer Shane McGuigan on Twitter: ✅

Further world title ambitions

 * "securing Cameron a mandatory shot at Katie Taylor." - sentence needs verifying with a reliable source ✅

Light-welterweight

 * "Cameron said on the decision to move up in weight," - progress to a higher weight class
 * It's not really a progression as such. Boxers move up and down in weight as they please
 * "with the winner gaining a shot" - the text in bold is informal ✅

WBC light-welterweight title

 * "Araújo failed to make weight" - think there are a few words missing from the end of this section of text ✅
 * "weighing 5 lbs over the 10 st light-welterweight limit" - the measurements should be put in the convert template ✅
 * "Cameron won by a shutout UD in what was described as a dominant performance." - who was the one that described the match as "a dominant performance" ✅
 * Also a dominant performance should be in quotations as per standards
 * It's not a direct quote, but I've changed it from "performance" to "win"

Results

 * All of this section will need to be completely verified with reliable sources ✅