Talk:Charles Bell

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Vbagchi. Peer reviewers: Keiradams, Bretsilverglate.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 17:12, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

[Untitled]
Overall, I think you have added some interesting contributions that have really rounded out the page as a biography. That being said, I do think that the section "Early Life and Education" attempts to carve out a nice narrative rather than just presenting the facts about Bell's early life. As a result, I think some of your own conclusions seep into the page: "and thus his mother had a profound influence on his early life" ; "these lectures had quite an impact on Bell" ; "Unfortunately, Charles Bell’s success in Edinburgh did not last long due to an infamous feud..."

I also think that this section could use more citations--this would also serve to verify what appear to be some of your conclusions, as discussed above.

Finally, the "Early Life and Education" section is presented as one big block of text, which makes it difficult to quickly skim to absorb the pertinent facts. Consider breaking apart the paragraph to make the article more readable.

Keiradams (talk) 06:28, 6 May 2017 (UTC)