Talk:Charles De Geer/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 18:22, 12 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 08:03, 15 June 2024 (UTC)

Hi Wolverine XI, thanks a lot for taking on this nomination. I just wanted to tell you that I'm currently on vacation, and may be slow (occassionally very slow) in responding for the next couple of weeks. I'm of course looking forward to the review and this chance to imporove the article, however. Best, Yakikaki (talk) 11:56, 15 June 2024 (UTC)


 * Links to the different titles/occupations in the lead wouldn't hurt
 * Fixed.


 * Please don’t start two consecutive sentences with the same word.
 * Fixed.


 * Sentence doesn't read well; please rephrase.
 * Fixed.


 * Not sure what "served" means here
 * Rephrased.


 * Is it rare worth mentioning twice?
 * Fixed.


 * Is this really important?
 * It is important enough for I think three of the other encyclopedic sources I've used to mention it. It sheds light on the Enlightenment environment De Geer lived in.


 * Looks like you are instructing rather than informing the reader
 * Rephrased.


 * How is this important? Does anybody really care?
 * Since you find it problematic I've removed it; however, in some older Swedish sources he is sometimes referred to as Carl, and I therefore included it for clarity.


 * Sorry but I gotta ask again, is it that important?
 * Of course it is important, because it clarifies a key aspect about his identity and nationality. He went from being a Dutch boy to being a Swedish high-ranking public figure and official.

This article suffers from excessive WP:UNDUE weight. It goes into unnecessary details about his childhood, his family, the building and many irrelevant information. This article fails the GA criteria under "focused". I'll give you time to try and improve the article, and see where it goes from there. Wolverine XI  ( talk to me ) 19:35, 15 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks again Wolverine XI for taking on this review. I have addressed the specific concerns above. However, without further concrete pointers and suggestions for improvement I find it hard to address your broader concern. A total of five paragraphs are spent summarising his background and early life, which I cannot agree is excessive. Compared to other GA articles, it seems to me to be more or less average. On the building, I also don't see where the exaggeration lies. I have written one paragraph about it, summarising the subject. His role in restoring and rebuilding a large manorial estate would make him noteworthy in its own right, especially considering he hired one of the foremost architects of his time. If anything, more could be written about De Geer's role in this regard. What other "many [perhaps you mean much?] irrelevant information" the article suffers from I don't immediately see; I would need your guidance as reviewer to point it out if I am to be able to constructively address this problem. Charles De Geer was notable for many things at once; to me, that is what makes him remarkable and fascinating. I believe that many readers who take the time to read the article about him on Wikipedia would also be happy to get substantial information about these different aspects, especially from an article bearing the GA mark. That has been my reasoning when including what I have included in this article. Kind regards, Yakikaki (talk) 16:10, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
 * It's clear that more work is needed, so I'm failing this good article candidate. I do not wish to enter a WP:FIXLOOP. Please read the article carefully and look at other GAs like Carl Linnaeus. Do re-nominate once the concerns are covered. Wolverine XI   ( talk to me ) 17:12, 20 June 2024 (UTC)