Talk:Charles Dinsmoor/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:40, 12 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The Rambling Man Thanks for taking.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:48, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * Infobox header says "Frederick dinsmoor".
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:14, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "a nineteenth-century American" no need for century (that's a given based on his birth/death) and no need to link American.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:14, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "to the bar" link.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:14, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Could put some geographical context in the lead.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Ireland but are from" were?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "1834.[1] Dinsmoor's family genealogy.." His family...
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * I think his "ancestors" sentence belongs with these sentences.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "arrive in America, John Dinsmoor. John came to America" repetitive.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "from Londonderry, Ireland and" comma after Ireland.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "governor of New Hampshire"" link?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Congress" link?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " Samuel Dinsmoor, Jr." these no longer use commas.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "New England" link.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Elk Township, Warren County, Pennsylvania has an article.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "became a student" where? How?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "... business for about eleven years in the same cities. The printing he did while teaching and attending school" merge.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "During the last three of this time he" years? And "of this time" is awkward phrasing.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and was in that" -> "and held that"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:53, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "he was twenty-two years old." do you mean he started a year-long course when he was 22?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "admitted to the bar of " link.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "assistant United States marshal" what does this mean? Is there a link?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "1860 census" link?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Dinsmoor has been" Dinsmoor was?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Oddfellows.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "his health failed. The last five years of his life he had failing health " bit repetitive again, suggest a reword to merge to avoid the repeat.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " (b. 10/17/1867)" write out in prose.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Link "patent No".


 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " of Stockton, California in" comma after Cali.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "after the subject of this article" not how we write things.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Ref 9, en-dash in the year range in the title.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "1886" is not a helpful caption.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have so it's on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 21:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. I'll start on the issues tomorrow.--Doug Coldwell (talk)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Ok, I made a few tweaks. Passing. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 08:22, 17 March 2021 (UTC)