Talk:Charles H. Jordan/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Voorts (talk · contribs) 19:18, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

Reviewing for August 2023 backlog drive. I am quickfailing this nom. The narrative of the article is disjointed and the organization does not follow MOS:LAYOUT, particularly MOS:BODY. A few sections are one or two sentences long, which fails MOS:PARA. Additionally, dividing the article into sections regarding facts that were learned following the subject's death, rather than incorporating those facts into sections about different periods of his life, does not make much sense. The lead is also far too long per MOS:LEADLENGTH.

The article also has some sourcing issues. The only non-newspaper secondary sources are: (1) a bio from the organization of which the subject was a part (the American Jewish Joint Distribution Committee ), which is arguably biased; and (2) a journal article, which is only cited once for a minor fact about the subject.

The article also has some too-close paraphrases, but I'm not sure it rises to the level of a copyright violation.

Finally, the article requires another copy edit. For example: ;.