Talk:Charles Irving (surgeon)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:38, 6 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:27, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "fl. 1768-1781" per MOS this should almost certainly be "fl. 1768–1781"
 * Dashes changed throughout.
 * "British Navy" do you mean Royal Navy?
 * Fixed.
 * "£5,000" inflate.
 * Done, hope the precision works.
 * "(c. 1738-1800[1])" Should be an en-dash.
 * Fixed.
 * " Dumfriesshire,[4]" might be worth stating this is in Scotland here, as it's not a commonly known location.
 * Added.
 * "how he became" how Charles Irving became (last "he" was his brother).
 * Fixed.
 * "Olaudah Equiano, 1789" not informative caption, perhaps explain why he's relevant here.
 * I've removed the image.
 * "to the British Navy in" again, you mean Royal Navy.
 * Yes.
 * "in 1770.[8] In January 1771" repetitive.
 * Reformulated.
 * "the Admiralty" link.
 * Done.
 * "James Lind, Lind " repetitive.
 * It's "the latter" now, but better suggestions welcome.
 * First Lord of the Admiralty link.
 * Done
 * "Joseph Priestley tasted" context, i.e. "The scientist Joseph..." or similar.
 * Added
 * "but ... wanted" non-breaking space between "but" and the ellipsis.
 * Done.
 * "the large sum of £5,000" remove "the large sum of" and inflate.
 * Done, same precision as above.
 * First Sec -> Permanent Secretary to the Admiralty.
 * Linking through redirect in case the article is ever split.
 * "Phipps' 1774" sadly, we now insist on "Phipps's"
 * Made worse.
 * "but Lord ..., but to ..." repetitive.
 * Improved.
 * "guardacostas" link? Or do we simply mean "coast guards"?
 * I think they were privateers. I haven't found the best possible link yet, will report back or footnote. May have been more or less coast guards, unlike the privateers of 50 years earlier. (some sources if I need them later:, , ). I just put "(coast guards)" after guarda costas for now.
 * "lost a sum of £3,723" delete "a sum of" and inflate.
 * Done.
 * "1779-1781," en-dash.
 * Done.
 * "1791 Statistical Account of Scotland " Accounts
 * No. The first book is just called The Statistical Account of Scotland.
 * Hoare source, en-dash in year range.
 * Done.
 * No geographical categories, even "People from Scotland" or similar?
 * Added People from Dumfries and Galloway.
 * Thank you very much The Rambling Man, I think I got everything. —Kusma (talk) 20:45, 11 October 2021 (UTC)