Talk:Charles Lively (labor spy)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:18, 11 October 2021 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this! —  Ghost River  16:18, 11 October 2021 (UTC)

Lede

 * Assuming that his full name was Charles Everett Lively, then per WP:HYPOCORISM, only that name should be included, as all of his other aliases are easily derived from that ✅
 * Replace hyphen with en dash in Baldwin–Felts Detective Agency ✅
 * "20th Century" "20th century" ✅
 * "He gained notoriety for killing a man during the Colorado Coalfield War and as one of the killers Matewan, West Virginia's pro-union police chief, Sid Hatfield after his acquittal for participating in the Battle of Matewan." "After fatally shooting a man during the Colorado Coalfield War, Lively spent several years working for Baldwin–Felts in the Great Plains before his assignment in Matewan, West Virginia. There, he was one of the men implicated in the assassination of Sid Hatfield, Matewan's pro-union police chief." ✅ this has been expanded. Figureofnine (talk • contribs)  14:51, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
 * On the whole, the lede needs some expansion to be a strong but concise overview of Lively's life ✅

West Virginia

 * The first paragraph from "Personal life and death" should be moved up here so that we have a better idea of where Lively is coming from and aren't just dropped into his adolescent life ✅
 * "He started working" "Lively began working" ✅
 * "who became a leader" "a future leader of" ✅
 * "Lively joined the United Mine Workers of America in Kanawha County, West Virginia in 1902.[1] He remained in the union after he went to work for Baldwin-Felts." "Lively joined the United Mine Worlers of America in Kanahawa County, West Virginia in 1902, and remained in the union even after his work began with the Baldwin–Felts Detective Agency." ✅
 * Is it "Mineworkers" or "Mine Workers"? Both are used here ✅ (it's Mine Workers)
 * "1910 Census" "1910 United States census" ✅
 * "that he was in El Paso County" ✅
 * Remove space between period and citation for the sentence ending "than stated in his testimony" ✅
 * In 1913, he attending a UMWA convention as a delegate, representing the local in Gatewood, West Virginia, The comma suggests this is an incomplete thought. Also, "he attending" "he attended" ✅

Colorado

 * "and becoming its president" "before becoming its president" ✅
 * "La Veta, Colorado to investigate" "La Veta, Colorado, and investigate" ✅
 * "shot to death" "fatally shot" ✅
 * "and was sentenced to 10 days in jail" ✅
 * "which he needed to do for his own protection since it was now known that he was a spy for the detective agency." "a decision that was necessary for his protection after the union became aware that he was a spy." ✅

Union infiltration in Matewan

 * "union sympathizer. This resulted in his being fired. That enhanced his reputation among union coal miners." "union sympathizer, for which he was fired. This firing only enhanced his reputation with union coal miners." ✅
 * "and them to Matewan" "and then to Matewan" ✅
 * Move [12] (currently after "Matewan in") to the end of the sentence, per WP:CITEDENSE ✅
 * Comma after "May 19, 1920" per MOS:DATECOMMA ✅
 * "February 1921, when he" ✅
 * Double period after "stemming from the battle" ✅
 * "Charleston, WV" "Charleston, West Virginia," ✅
 * "Albert and Lee Felts,brother of the co-owner of the agency, Thomas Felts," "Albert and Lee Felts, brothers of the agency's co-owner Thomas Felts," ✅
 * Link first instance of Sid Hatfield ✅
 * Remove "Lively's biographer", mentioned earlier ✅
 * "it is clear" "it was clear" ✅
 * Strike "Thus his presence in Matewan was now personal as well as business." ✅
 * Missing space between sentences after "killing of the Felts brothers." ✅
 * There's some jumbling in the third paragraph, combined with a one-sentence paragraph after. I would move the sentence After the gunfight, Lively helped plan violent actions planned by union men, and was so trusted that he became a bodyguard for Mother Jones and other union officials. to directly after the sentence Lively was now instructed to cultivate friendships with the union participants in the gunfight, and obtain information that would lead to the conviction and execution of Hatfield and the others who were involved in the killing of the Felts brothers. Then, the sentence Thomas Felt accused Hatfield of killing his brother Albert and publicly stated that he wanted to see him hanged. can be placed right after According to Yoho, Lively's biographer, personal records indicate that by then it is clear that Thomas Felts wanted Hatfield dead. Thus his presence in Matewan was now personal as well as business. ✅
 * "Brewer's testimony, however, was ultimately ineffective." ✅
 * Move After the trial, Lively was expelled from the union for 99 years. to the paragraph before it ✅

Killing of Sid Hatfield and Edward Chambers

 * "were shot dead" "were fatally shot" ✅
 * Strike "who was accompanied by his wife" ✅
 * "coup-de-grace" "coup de grâce" ✅
 * "in order to lay the groundwork" ✅
 * Missing right-hand quote in "signed his own death warrant" ✅

After Matewan

 * "He was indicted for pistol-whipping a man while making an arrest. He was found guilty of using unlawful force, fined $100 and sentenced to 60 days in jail. In 1924 he was arrested for beating up a grand jury witness against him." "There, he was engaged in a number of violent incidents. He was fined $100 and sentenced to 60 days in jail after being found guilty of using unlawful force when he pistol-whipped a man during an arrest. In 1924, Lively was arrested again for assaulting a grand jury witness against him." ✅

Personal life and death

 * "one of the eleven children of" "one of 11 children born to" per MOS:NUM ✅
 * ""Everett Lively," and it is unclear if his birth name was "Charles."" ""Everett Lively", and it is unclear if his birth name was "Charles"." per MOS:LQ ✅
 * Missing space between sentences after "six sons and three daughters" ✅
 * "20 years younger than him" "20 years his junior" ✅

In popular culture

 * Add clause "which depicts the Battle of Matewan and the subsequent assassination of Hatfield."✅

General comments

 * No pictures, to those criteria are N/A
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks great

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me if there are any questions. —  Ghost River  19:34, 11 October 2021 (UTC)


 * thanks for getting to this so quickly. The GA instructions (this is my first) said the waiting period can run into the months! Will look at your review. Figureofnine (talk • contribs)  05:15, 21 October 2021 (UTC)


 * I believe everything has been addressed. My only area of uncertainty is the book references. I only used Yoho. There are one or two other book references that seem fairly complete, with page numbers. Figureofnine (talk • contribs) 14:51, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I made a few additional MOS fixes, but otherwise, I think that this is good to go! —  Ghost River  18:28, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Great, and thank you for good work on this. Figureofnine (talk • contribs) 20:17, 23 October 2021 (UTC)