Talk:Charles Matthews (basketball)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:08, 29 January 2018 (UTC)

Will read through this article and give comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 12:08, 29 January 2018 (UTC)
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 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
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 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
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Early life

 * Split off the paragraph into two at the point Matthews signed his letter of intent so it is not uncomfortable to read
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:16, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
 * "In his youth basketball took a backseat to the trombone and skateboard, but he began to take basketball seriously the summer before his high school freshman year" - {{xt|In his youth, he played the trombone and skateboard, but started taking basketball seriously in the summer before his school freshman year."
 * Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:18, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
 * "He committed to John Calipari and Kentucky on February 26, 2014 during his junior year." - reword this sentence so it reads as follows: {{xt|Matthews committed to playing basketball with John Calipri and the Kentucky Wildcats on February 26, 2014 during his junior year.}}
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:21, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
 * "Matthews was the first commit for Kentucky's 2015 class." - {{xt|Matthews was the first to commit to playing basketball for Kentucky's 2015 class.}}
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:24, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
 * "Matthews earned tournament MVP." - {{xt|Hence, Matthew earned the tournament's Most Valuable Player (MVP) award.}}
 * Done without the Hence, because there is no content to support it. Hence would require documentation of a superlative performance in the preceding sentences.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:27, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
 * "He officially signed his National Letter of Intent on National Signing Day, November 22, 2014." {{x|on National Signing Day held on November 22, 2014.}}
 * I don't understand this point.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:47, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "for the 21–8 St. Rita's team that was eliminated from the 2014 IHSA Class 4A playoffs by the Jahlil Okafor-led Whitney M. Young Magnet High School team." - repetition of "team"
 * I am just going along here, but I removed the 2nd use of the word.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:49, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "During Matthews four-year high school" - {{xt|Matthews'}}
 * Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:51, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "Following his senior season, he was a first team Associated Press Class 4A All-state selection." - {{xt|After his senior season, he was a selection for the Associated Press' Class-4A All-State first team.}}
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD)

Kentucky

 * "Matthews three starts" - same issue as the second to last one in the early life sub-section
 * Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:58, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "against #16 ranked Louisville." - No. 16
 * I have written dozens of WP:CBBALL articles and I have never used No.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:59, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
 * We can gloss over that query then. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)

Michigan

 * "Following the season he had a medical procedure on his hip." - is there any information that says why he had a medical procedure on his hip?
 * "He served on the scout team for the 2016–17 Michigan Wolverines men's basketball team." - reptition of "team"
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:06, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "He posted career-highs of 28 points and 8 rebounds in the first round of the 2017 Maui Invitational Tournament on November 20 against LSU" - Matthews posted career-highs of 28 points and eight rebounds in the first round game of the 2017 Maui Invitational Tournament against LSU on November 20
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:45, 7 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "The following night he" add a comma between night and he
 * Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:30, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "Since Moe Wagner added 21 points and 10 rebounds the team" - same issue as above but with the words "rebounds" and "the" this time
 * Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:32, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "On December 21, Michigan handed the previously winless Alabama A&M Bulldogs a 97–47 defeat" - On December 21, Michigan was defeated by the previously Alabama A&M Bulldogs in a 97-47 defeat
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:59, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
 * "as Matthews posted another career high with 31 points." - as Matthews posted 31 points, another career high.
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:34, 2 February 2018 (UTC)

Personal

 * I'd personally move the names of his parents to make it the first sentence of this section and put his siblings after that
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:20, 8 February 2018 (UTC)