Talk:Charon i Luren tutar/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:10, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

This has been in the queue for two months, therefore it is time to get going with a review! --K. Peake 07:10, 19 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:49, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * Thanks.
 * The subtitle is not sourced anywhere in the body
 * Added.
 * Wikilink Jean Fredman
 * Done.
 * The classic mythology part is not sourced in the body
 * Added.
 * "asks Fredman to" → "invites Fredman to"
 * Done.
 * "runs down his closes," → "runs down his clothes,"
 * Done.
 * Wikilink Jesus
 * Done.
 * Add a sentence about the reception of the epistle itself
 * Done.

Context

 * Are you sure Jean Fredman's full name needs to be used on all of the mentions here? I never picked up on this aspect in my previous reviews
 * Indeed, surname is sufficient. I think someone else wanted Jean everywhere.
 * Too much excess space at the end of this
 * Fixed, I hope.

Music

 * Audio sample looks good apart from the usage of the term "late" epistle; try something more appropriate and relevant
 * The last few epistles are commonly called late, like eg Shakespeare's late plays or Tolkien's late essays, it's quite a normal usage.
 * Pipe courtly dance to Courtesy
 * Done.
 * "consisting of seventeen lines." → "consisting of 17 lines." per MOS:NUM
 * Done.

Lyrics

 * Again, should Jean Fredman's full name really be used?
 * Indeed not. Fixed.

Reception and legacy

 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks.
 * "of their accounts of" → "of their respective accounts of"
 * Fixed.
 * "Death was present amongst" → "death was present amongst"
 * Said "the figure of Death", i.e. personified, with capital for his proper name.
 * I don't think "he appears as" is the correct terminology, unless Death is a character's analysis and I'm missing something? If this is true, then the above capitalisation needn't be changed.
 * Yes, as above, he's the bloke with the black cloak and the scythe for his grim harvest.
 * Introduce the other epistle as No. 24
 * Done.
 * "and which is similarly addressed" → "while it is similarly addressed"
 * Edited.
 * Remove comma after "best-known poem"
 * Done. There's a team of editors who add commas in odd places.
 * The term "startling" does not sound very neutral; maybe try something like "sudden" instead?
 * Done; note that this paragraph is all attributed to non-editorial sources.
 * Pipe intervals to Interval (music)
 * Done.
 * Introduce the other epistle as No. 23
 * Done.
 * "sacrificed for us" and" → "sacrificed for us", and"
 * Done.
 * "There remain" what remains exactly? This needs to be more specific.
 * Actually the sentence says exactly what, the last 3 epistles, reworded.
 * Pipe Liksom en Herdinna to Liksom en Herdinna, högtids klädd
 * Done.
 * "of epistles 3" → "of epistles No. 3"
 * Done.
 * "crossed the Styx, and had" → "crossed the Styx and had"
 * Fixed.
 * Last para looks good!
 * Thanks.
 * Pipe red-figure to Red-figure pottery on the last img
 * Done.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; that review progressed smoothly! --K. Peake 07:56, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

OK, I think that's all done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:50, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, you were very understanding in any areas where we came to disagreements! --K. Peake 07:11, 20 April 2022 (UTC)