Talk:Chief networking officer/Archives/2011

Tone of new section
I put the recent text addition by Octaviopitaluga in a separtate section Responsibilities and labeled it for tone. The heading isn't very accurate for the section contents. The text is vague, but I thought parts might be usable if trimmed a lot. Here are some examples of what I see as tone or writing problems:
 * "He/she will solve eventual conflict matters and will compromise the mutual best interests." Unclear.
 * "The CNO is a direct contact, although not primary, and will always be ready to assume the management of any partnership with any stakeholder during the primary network manager absence." Unclear.
 * "For this reason, I consider the CNO, the future leader." Personal opinion.
 * "The CNO is the business networks portfolio strategist and architect acting as a coach and trainer during the soft implementation of related project during the transition from existing and traditional model towards virtual agile global networking enterprise one at both internal and external levels." Extremely unclear.
 * "The CNO´s job description could be summarized as a higher value and moral code strategic thinker." See Weasel words

--Busy Stubber 15:39, 22 October 2007 (UTC)

Confusion
In the first two lines there is confusion between the telecomunication and computer hardware use of the term networking; building a hard network of wires, switched and plugs, and the interpersonal view of networking, building relationships between people. Johnsveitch 04:19, 24 October 2007 (UTC)
 * "Network" has a wide range of uses these days; it's a confusing term. In an encyclopedia for general readers, readers come into this article with different ideas on what "networking" might mean in the context of this job title. See http://www.etymonline.com/index.php?term=network. Keeping in mind general readers, anything you can do to clarify the role and responsibilities of a chief networking officer is helpful :) --Busy Stubber 19:57, 24 October 2007 (UTC)