Talk:Childhood chronic illness

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 3 March 2020 and 28 March 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Dsalvarez. Peer reviewers: Rluna2020.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 18:58, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Workplan
I’ll be editing this page as part of a Wikipedia elective course at UCSF. In general I will aim to bolster this page with more up to date and focused introduction to childhood chronic illness, especially since right now it seems to focus mostly on pain and psychological consequences of the topic. I will write for the general audience and avoid medical jargon. I will aim to write about chronic illnesses as a general group and not delve into one particular diagnosis (ie cancer).

Some resources will be literature reviews on the perspective of siblings, parent interventions, and global burden of pediatric chronic diseases and a systematic review of quality of life in affected patients.

My work plan is as follows:


 * - Improve the lead paragraph to be less US centric as well as more thorough and descriptive of chronic illness in children. Make the definition more clear.
 * - Add more relevant citations to the entire article, as right now they are coming from only a couple of books
 * - Improve the content sections to flow better and match the Manual of Style for syndromes more closely. Currently I am thinking of making the following sections (pending deeper literature search):
 * Epidemiology
 * Management
 * Outcomes/ prognosis
 * Impact (social, developmental, economic perhaps)
 * Advocacy/ research Organizations
 * - Although it is part of a series on Psychology, I think the picture is not very fitting since a broad article on the topic doesn’t just involve psychology, so I’d love to hear any thoughts if I could change that. Dsalvarez (talk) 23:18, 5 March 2020 (UTC)

WikiMed Spring 2020 Peer-Review
Hello, Wikipedia community! I’m a medical student who will be reviewing and providing feedback on this article as part of our Wikipedia elective. At the start of the elective, this page was rated as a C-Class, high-importance article. The editor user:Dsalvarez had the following goals:


 * Improve the lead paragraph to be more thorough and descriptive of chronic illness in children.
 * Add more relevant citations to the entire article
 * Improve the content sections to flow better and match the Manual of Style for syndromes more closely with sections on epidemiology, management, outcomes/prognosis, impact and advocacy/research organizations.

I will be providing user:Dsalvarez with feedback on her recent edits to the lead paragraphs and the new content sections in accordance with the manual of styles.

General impression: You’re doing excellent work. Based on the original plan, it looks like most of the stated goals have been accomplished. The lead paragraph is well-developed and includes a more general description of childhood chronic illness, and a clear definition that describes its duration and its contrast to acute illness. Most of the sentences in the lead paragraph are cited properly with reliable literature sources. In terms of your page’s content, you have made significant progress by adding an epidemiology, impact and management section which multiple subsections for each.

Constructive feedback for lead section and content:


 * I would recommend adding more citations to the second paragraph that follows the lead. The second-to-last sentence regarding improvements in public health and infrastructure leading to decreased child mortality would be a perfect place to include statistics on recent changes in the survival rates of children with chronic illness. Consider reviewing data in the following papers, though survival rates may have changed in the last few years, so I would double-check if there are newer publications: doi: 10.1146/annurev-clinpsy-032511-143108, doi: 10.1001/jama.2010.130, and doi: 10.1007/s00431-008-0697-y
 * Based on your goals listed above, the only content section that is pending is Advocacy/research organizations, and you could consider adding the economic impact subsection pending your literature review.
 * Consider describing the prevalence of chronic illness in childhood vs adolescence in the epidemiology section.
 * Consider including a third subsection under Management to describe some pharmacological or alternative management strategies for chronic childhood illness. Perhaps you can list of some of the most common childhood chronic illnesses (asthma, diabetes, sickle cell), briefly describe the overall management strategies and have links to the main article page of these conditions.

Overall, you've made great progress. I enjoyed reading your page. Keep up the great work, and let me know if you have any questions! Rluna2020 (talk) 04:57, 23 March 2020 (UTC)

Wiki Education assignment: UCSF SOM Inquiry In Action-- Wikipedia Editing 2022
— Assignment last updated by Y.s.a.law (talk) 16:56, 16 September 2022 (UTC)

Workplan for WikiEdits Project UCSF Fall 2022 
 * Our goals is to improve this article by making the following edits to this page
 * Epidemiology
 * Update Statistics used to include more current data
 * Include data on changes to child mortality.
 * Include the examples of common chronic illnesses in children
 * Add childhood disability statistics
 * Impact
 * Expand the family and child development section
 * Example - include economic burden on families
 * Include societal impact if that can be found, consider using exemplar diseases as an approach.
 * Management:
 * Update sources to use secondary sources
 * Consider Adding Pharmacological Management
 * Include Nutrition Section
 * Transition of Care from Pediatrics to Adult
 * Strategies for Chronic Illness Prevention in children ex Common Screening Tests
 * Change structure some to match the suggested content layout for diseases/syndromes/disorders from Wiki Manual of Style
 * Structural Edits for Impact Section - Split into Outcomes and Society and Culture

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Jvb26 (talk • contribs) 18:41, 12 September 2022 (UTC) — Assignment last updated by EBPS rulez (talk) 18:16, 12 September 2022 (UTC)

Feedback for Wiki Education assignment: UCSF SOM Inquiry In Action-- Wikipedia Editing 2022


 * The content added was very relevant to the topic and was up-to-date. It was neutral and did not argue for one view over another. A few of the sources cited were a little old, but they seemed to all be good and reliable sources. The content was well written and concise, and there were no grammar errors except for in the first sentence (I believe educator should be plural rather than singular). Overall, the changes made to the article were clear, relevant, and unbiased. Ella.olgin (talk) 02:51, 17 September 2022 (UTC)


 * My colleague's goal for this article included:
 * 1. Epidemiology
 * Feedback: The team met their goals of including examples of common chronic illnesses and adding in more updated statistics. Only feedback would be to see if there were even more recent data on the epi of childhood chronic illness (post 2006)
 * 2. Impact
 * Feedback: for the development section, removing sources that are single paper and using secondary sources could be helpful
 * 3. Management
 * Feedback: the team met their goals of updating sources and including a nutrition and transition of care sections. A pharmacological management section may be a useful supplement in this section and would suggest to still try to include some common drugs used and the impact of those drug on livelihood/quality of life of children with chronic illness. Also prevention strategies could be its own section and not under management. Overall great job! Y.s.a.law (talk) 02:58, 17 September 2022 (UTC)
 * The editing team made updates to three different areas including Epidemiology, Impact, and Management of childhood chronic illness. Per review, the team seemed to have accomplished their goals in updating statistics and addition of relevant examples. Sources cites are scholarly although a couple of them are outdated but that could be due to lack of data available on this topic. I really liked that, under the management section, they included nutrition section along with pharmaceutical options. This provides the users with many different options to manage care and that too from scholarly resources. All the changes made seem unbiased and in flow with the previous content. Asingh238 (talk) 21:50, 17 September 2022 (UTC)