Talk:Chris Hussey/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nehme1499 (talk · contribs) 18:57, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi, I'll take care of this nomination. This is my first review, hopefully it goes well for both of us :) Nehme1499 18:57, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Okay thank you, it's very thorough. I have addressed those points now.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Perfect, I've also cleaned up a couple of details. With the changes made, I'm happy to promote the article :) Nehme1499 13:48, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Infobox

 * It's standard not to put questions marks (?) when information is unknown. For example, "200?–200?" should be removed; there is no problem in not having a year range.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Left-back can be linked to Full-back (association football)
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * I would add "professional" between, as it's standard to do so for professional footballers.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Change to, in line with the infobox.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * . Add "senior" or "professional" before contract, to emphasise that he didn't move to another youth team.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : no need for "for an undisclosed fee", can be just kept in the main body of the article.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I would link the seasons (for e.g. ), to their respective club seasons (2010–11 Coventry City F.C. season). Same goes for the league seasons.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * The lead is generally good, though I think it's slightly overly-detailed. Try to cut down a bit. For example, can by changed to something like . I think the two paragraphs should be halved.
 * Have trimmed it to roughly half.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Also, I don't think specific apps are necessary in the lead, except in the first instance . You could generally replace those with "as a starter".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Career

 * Add a section for the first sentence called "Early career" or "Youth career".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

AFC Wimbledon

 * I would prefer to add "season" to 2006–07, so that it pipes as such: 2006–07 season. It's just my personal preference, though. The same applies throughout the article.
 * I prefer not to link season.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use a regular dash (pre-season).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : "first-choice" acts as an adjective to "left-back", and should be hyphenated.
 * Ah good, the last GA review said the opposite.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : with "a" victory?
 * I always said "with victory" but I think it's better the the scoreline anyway.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : should be hyphenated in both instances.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : can be joined into a single sentence.
 * Okay good.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I would divide the first paragraph into two, between and
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Coventry City

 * , as opposed to another bench? I would remove "substitute".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use a regular hyphen.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Link metatarsal
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : swap "then" with "was".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * . Change to "final seasonal appearance tally", to avoid repetition with "season" in the next sentence.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : hyphen between "first" and "team" (in all instances).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use "assisted" to avoid repetition.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * . Add commas before and after "however" (...form, however, and...)
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * It would be a good idea to divide the Wimbledon and Coventry sections in further subsections (either by season, or year span). Two or three subsections each should be enough.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

AFC Wimbledon (2)

 * Rename the section into "Return to AFC Wimbledon".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use a regular hyphen.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : comma after "however".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Burton Albion

 * : using "scored" twice in the same sentence is too repetitive.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Divide the paragraph into two, starting from.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : regular hyphen.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : the sentence structure is a bit clunky, with two -ing verbs in a row.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I notice that "he" is being used far more than "Hussey". Try to balance the two out.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Bury

 * : "in late-April".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Link free transfer, also in the first instance in the lead.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use a regular hyphen.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use regular hyphens in all instances. Also, try to not repeat "left-back position" all three times; use other wording.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : replace ten with 10.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * In general, as I pointed out above, try also using "assist" instead of "set up" sometimes.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * The Hussey/he problem I pointed out in the section above applies to the whole article. (Same with Hussey's/his)
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use quotes, as "60%" is just a random number the manager used figuratively.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Also divide this section into subsections.
 * Are you sure there aren't an excessive amount of sections now?--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Sheffield United

 * : add a comma between "Lafferty" and "and".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Change "would feature" into "featured".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Add a subsection titled "Loan to Swindon Town" for the second paragraph; also, divide the second paragraph into two (starting from "He was an ever-present in the side until he suffered a groin injury).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Cheltenham Town

 * Divide into subsections.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : change to.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : add a comma between "games" and "and".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : use an en dash (–).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * . I would rephrase into:.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Change "free-kick" into "free kick", and link to Free kick (association football).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : remove "and", and remove the hyphens from "three-and-a-half" as it doesn't act as an adjective.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : "Hussey said that".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Port Vale

 * : since it's a direct quote, remove "that" and add a colon (... said: "I've always...).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

International career

 * Rephrase to:
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Style of play

 * Link to Defender (association football), Full-back (association football), Wing-back (association football), Wide midfielder, Cross (association football), Set piece (football).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Add a comma after "attacking abilities".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Personal life

 * Divide into paragraphs, as his OCD, daughters, app, and character aren't linked together.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Career statistics

 * General consensus is to pipe EFL Cup into League Cup.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * : change the "2"s into "Two".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Images

 * I know that finding images for footballers can be very difficult, so the lack of them won't impact the review. Still, did you try searching in free-to-use websites, such as flickr?
 * Could not find any.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Assessment

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: