Talk:Chris Wilkinson (architect)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 19:57, 18 June 2022 (UTC)

Nominator: Ktin (talk · contribs) at 23:34, 3 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

 * Prose
 * Do we know the death location?
 * Citations are usually not required in the lead, as it repeats the info already present in the article (WP:LEADCITE). Is there any reason for having those two citations in the lead?
 * "He was known for his" — This arises the question: "According to whom?". If multiple source back up this assertion, something like "He was widely known for ... " might work.
 * Do we have anything to link to techno-centric design?
 * Write full "Order of the British Empire" in the lead.
 * Our article calls "RIBA Stirling Prizes" just "Stirling Prize" (same comment for the prose as well)
 * Maybe "back to back" should be "for two continuous years". Is that better?
 * The lead should have a bit more about his career.
 * "Wilkinson was born" — specify full name on the first mention in the prose
 * We name his mother, but not his father?
 * "He graduated with a degree" — Do we know which degree?
 * "During this period he took" — specify whether 'he' here means Wilkinson or Lasdun.
 * "joined Norman Foster's firm" — no need to repeat the full name again, just surname would work
 * Add a comma after 'Michael Hopkins'
 * "with Richard Rogers's " — no need to repeat the full name again, just surname would work
 * "on the London Underground's Jubilee line extension." — should be "Jubilee Line Extension" (in title case)
 * "for Dyson Institute of Engineering and Technology" — missing the definite article
 * "The English newspaper The Guardian wrote about the work" — Just a optional suggestion: Newspaper's don't write, correspondents do.
 * "in Rotherham, won the firm a RIBA Stirling Prize." — why comma?
 * "across the Tyne" — specify 'River'
 * Add a comma after "blinking bridge"
 * "the Guangzhou International Finance Center a skyscraper in Guangzhou in China" — should be "the Guangzhou International Finance Center, a skyscraper in Guangzhou, China"
 * "at University of Exeter" — missing the definite article
 * "in Kings Cross, London into" — missing MOS:GEOCOMMA
 * "His publications include Supersheds, an exploration of the history and evolution of large-volume universal spaces" — This was partially previously mentioned.
 * "working with" — If the source gives liberty, it should be something like "working usually with"
 * "Wilkinson married his wife Diana (née Edmunds)" — 'his wife' should be removed.
 * Link supermodel
 * Avoid one lined paragraphs.
 * In the section: "Select architectural works", I'd suggest to write the buildings and work names as a bulleted list instead. And use few images, such as Gardens by the Bay, Guangzhou, etc. along with the text in the Career section. Just an optional suggestion.


 * Images
 * Caption for the lead image would be helpful, specifying when was it pictured (if known)
 * NFMR seems fine.
 * Suggesting to add ALT text.
 * Rest images seem fine; you're lucky that UK has freedom of panorama!

Overall it has a few formatting issues:
 * References
 * Ref 1 is a bare URL
 * Ref#4: Lowercase title
 * Ref#7, #18, #19: Has a generic name in the author name parameter. Remove it.
 * Fix the quote and remove the definite article in Architects' Journal
 * Why is https://propertylistings.ft.com/propertynews/united-kingdom/5284-gasholder-apartments-recall-london-s-industrial-past.html a WP:RS?
 * The Google Arts & Culture source is by the Royal Academy of Art.
 * Ref#13: Chicago Architecture Center should be the website name
 * Ref#15: 'www.royalacademy.org.uk' should be 'Royal Academy of Art' (I think)
 * "designboom | architecture & design magazine" — check formatting


 * Spot check
 * Ref#3a: OK
 * Red#3k: OK
 * Ref#15: OK
 * Ref#16: OK, text is a bit similar but that appears to be a case of WP:LIMITED
 * Ref#20: OK

General discussion
Hi! I'll review this article as a part of the June 2022 backlog drive. Feel free to let me know if you have any questions or need clarification for any point. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 19:56, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 20:57, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you for these very detailed notes . I am running a tad busy in my offline world. Will address these questions when I can sneak-in some time. If I could get some time for these edits, that would be much appreciated. Thanks again. Ktin (talk) 03:35, 21 June 2022 (UTC)
 * No rush, just a quick nudge, Ktin. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 13:19, 4 July 2022 (UTC)
 * About a month ... I'm afraid I'd have to fail this. Feel free to renominate after making the changes. - Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:26, 12 July 2022 (UTC)