Talk:Chris Wood (footballer, born 1991)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 19:44, 25 February 2018 (UTC)

I'll take this one on, will post review in the next day or so. Kosack (talk) 19:44, 25 February 2018 (UTC)

Initial review:

Lead

 * vice captain > vice-captain.
 * The lead stops at 2009 with West Brom for his club career, which is before he really made a name for himself. That needs updating.
 * New Zealand national team is linked twice in the lead.

Early life

 * attended Royal Oak Primary and Cambridge East primary second primary needs a capital letter.
 * First sentence seems a bit overlong. I would suggest breaking into two sentences, one for his schooling and one for his early youth teams.
 * The two primary schools and Cambridge FC are not supported by any of the three references in the paragraph.
 * ASB Premiership is a redirect so should be piped to New Zealand Football Championship.
 * Consensus at WP:Football is that we don't use sponsored names if alternatives are available so Lotto Sport Italia NRFL Premier should be Northern Region Premier or NRFL Premier.

West Bromwich Albion

 * Remove club link per WP:OVERLINK, already linked in text above.
 * I would add a mention of who Roger Wilkinson actually is if he doesn't have a link.
 * First sentence could probably do with merging into the paragraph below rather than being on its own.
 * Second paragraph has one ref which doesn't support any of the youth and reserve team goalscoring info or the final sentence about being the fifth New Zealander in the Premier League.
 * "Injuries to West Brom front-liners gave Wood a surprise call up for the trip to Fratton Park" seems somewhat informal to me, how about "Injuries to several West Brom players saw Wood handed a surprise call up to the first-team for a Premier League match against Portsmouth at Fratton Park?"
 * Premiership hasn't been used since 2007, should be Premier League.

Brighton & Hove Albion

 * Bristol Rovers and Peterborough United links need piping.

Bristol City

 * Section could do with expanding I think, only a single sentence for a nineteen match loan spell is a bit short.

Millwall

 * Unlink Millwall, Cardiff City and Brighton & Hove Albion, all linked in previous sections.
 * Leeds and Blackburn links need piping.
 * Last two sentences are unsourced.

Leicester City

 * In the opening sentence, West Brom are referred to as "it", for consistency with the rest of the article, "they" would be more suitable.
 * His transfer to Leicester in the first paragraph seems a bit out of sync timewise. It mentions he is expected to join the club in the January transfer window and doesn't mention him joining on loan until the end. I think this needs restructuring slightly so that his loan move is mentioned with him agreeing personal terms, as the reference states, and then a mention of the transfer being completed once the window opened after his one loan match.
 * Unlink Bristol City and Leicester City, previously linked in the article.
 * Second paragraph is largely unsourced and is mostly not about Wood. Could perhaps be trimmed.

Ipswich Town loan

 * Heading needs brackets on loan to maintain consistency with other sections.
 * Second sentence is unsourced.
 * Again, section is a bit short, could mention debut, goals, games played etc.

2015–16 season

 * Unlink Leeds United and Doncaster Rovers, linked previously in the article.
 * Are all these goals notable? Second and third paragraphs seem to just list every goal he scored with no obvious explanation to why each one is notable.

2016–17

 * Perhaps link overhead kick to Bicycle kick.
 * Goal against Burton in the first paragraph has no obvious notability, I'd remove it.
 * Unlink Derby County and Nottingham Forest, previously linked in the article.
 * Wigan Athletic link needs piping.

2017–18

 * Bolton Wanderers link needs piping.
 * Is Alioski's assist relevant to Wood?
 * Link Sunderland
 * The player > he.
 * Does ref 64 need repeating? If it's referencing the two sentences then using it once at the end of the paragraph would be sufficient.

International career

 * Under-17 > under-17
 * First paragraph is unsourced.
 * Unlink West Bromwich Albion, linked previously in the article.
 * "named in the All Whites World Cup squad" sentence could be reworded to include a tournament link. Perhaps "named in the All Whites squad for the 2010 FIFA World Cup?"
 * "He came on as a substitute in the first group match in a 1–1 draw against Slovakia and New Zealand's first ever point in a World Cup finals match" Sentence is incomplete, "as New Zealand claimed their first ever" perhaps?
 * The final sentence is a bit muddled and is unsourced.
 * "famous draw" is a bit POV, so needs some strong sourcing if you want to keep it.
 * Group doesn't need the capital letter.
 * "first official international goal", official seems unnecessary, did he score an unofficial goal?
 * Fourth paragraph is unsourced.
 * Squad doesn't need a capital letter after New Zealand Under 23s
 * I don't believe the under in under 23s need a capital letter either.
 * New Zealand under 23s is linked twice.
 * Second sentence needs breaking up into more than one big long one.
 * No need to use his surname every time he's mentioned, he will suffice after the first use.
 * Four sentences separated into individual paragraphs is a bit messy, I would suggest they need merging a bit more.
 * vice captain > vice-captain
 * Unlink captain in last sentence, linked in previous sentence.

Career statistics

 * Is there a page relevant to franchise team that the phrase can be linked to? I can't find any obvious page so it's not a major issue if there's not.
 * Link Chatham Cup.

Lead

 * Premier League is linked twice. ✅

Early life

 * The source added for his early schooling is questionable and scores highly on a possible copyvio, I would wager it's taken the information from here. I would suggest a better source needs to found. ✅

West Bromwich Albion

 * That citation tag needs taking care of, either by finding a suitable source or removing anything unsourced. ✅ - thanks for that.

Bristol City (loan)

 * The second use of Bristol City can be changed to avoid repetition, the club, side or team would all be sufficient. ✅
 * Unlink Doncaster and Nottingham Forest, previously linked. ✅ - I (Iggy the Swan) inserted the links yesterday.
 * Doncaster > Doncaster Rovers. ✅ - yes not to be confused with the city.
 * Coventry > Coventry City with link, only time they're mentioned. ✅

Leicester City

 * "finished the regular season with 11 in 24", probably change to 11 goals in 24 appearances to look a bit neater. ✅ - made it neater
 * "In a dramatic finale, after Watford goalkeeper Manuel Almunia saved both a penalty taken by Anthony Knockaert and a rebound which would have sent Leicester through to the final, Troy Deeney scored in the seventh minute of added time to take Watford through on aggregate", I still believe this paragraph is far too focused on events other than Wood. ✅ - agreed it is not focusing on Wood here.
 * "scored a stunning long-range volley", I would put stunning in quotation marks to show it's taken from a source to avoid being a WP:PEACOCK word. ✅ - taken from the source

Ipswich Town (loan)

 * Norwich are now mentioned here, above a link further down. Link their name here and drop the link in the Leeds section. ✅

Leeds United

 * 2015-16
 * Last three sentences of the first paragraph all use Wood, try to avoid repetition like this. ✅
 * Again, the second and third paragraphs are just an indiscriminate list of goals with no obvious reason as to why they are notable. ✅
 * "to finish Leeds United's top goal" > to finish as...