Talk:Christel Boom/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 13:35, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

I'll take this on throughout the day Eddie891 Talk Work 13:35, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments
Overall, very nice work! I haven't checked the sourcing yet, so hold on, but all prose commenting is done. As always, feel free to disagree with any of my comments or any of the light ce'ing I've taken the liberty of doing. Eddie891 Talk Work 17:14, 8 April 2020 (UTC) Other than that, everything looks good. Article is well written, sourcing is good (other than the one thing I mention above), imgs are good, reasonably comprehensive and no copyvio. Just a few minor things here and there, I will be placing on hold. Eddie891 Talk Work 22:36, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "penetration of the" maybe "infiltration of the"
 * Changed as suggested. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Brandt's resignation as Chancellor" maybe "Brandt's resignation as Chancellor in XXXX"
 * Added "in the same year." Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "arrested and imprisoned for seven years" add what year she was arrested in?
 * As this was also in 1974, it would seem repetitive. It already says she was imprisoned for seven years, and released in 1981, which gives the time frame anyway. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "She retired in western Berlin" should 'western' be capitalized?
 * No. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Christel's father was arrested" her adopted father, presumably?
 * Indeed, corrected. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Could you work in that this was during World War II somewhere in the first body paragraph?
 * Good point, added. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "but the end of the war prevented her from" -> "end of the war in 1945"?
 * Added. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Committee of the Fighters for Peace" maybe add what the committee was?
 * Added. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Günter travelled to West Germany a few times in the early 1950s for the Stasi" when did he start working for the Stasi? Was it then or before?
 * It's a little unclear. My reading of the sources is that essentially at that point, he was sort of "contracting for" the Stasi, rather than a fully fledged member. English language sources don't go into much depth on it, and a combination of Google translate and my rudimentary German aren't good enough to work it out for sure. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * use lang for a foreign language
 * Fixed. Ironic, given how often I bring this up in my own reviews. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The pair were put on trial for high treason in Düsseldorf; " when?
 * Added. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "embarrassing nature of the infiltration," surely it was not the infiltration that was embarrassing, but the discovery of it?
 * The infiltration itself was embarrassing for West Germany. The discovery would have been embarrassing for East Germany. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "She divorced Guillaume" is there a year?
 * Added. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * maybe mention German reunification in the 'later life' section
 * Added. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * maybe provide the English titles of the German sources?
 * Added. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I couldn't access Shaken Not Stirred from the link you gave, but found it online here
 * Changed link. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I don't see source #10 citing that Birkelbach was the party chairman, only that he was aide to the Governor of the German state of Hessen.
 * Added alternative source. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It's more of an A-class or FA thing, but you should consider standardizing between referring to books in a bibliography and citing them directly in the inline cites. I'd also recommend using Sfn or harvnb if you go with the former.
 * Done. Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. It was nice to revisit this article; I was always planning to work up the article on Günter too, and this might give me the push (although I'm not that eager for the translation work again!) Harrias  talk 08:20, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , Looks good then, nice work! Happy to promote Eddie891 Talk Work 12:56, 9 April 2020 (UTC)