Talk:Christgau's Record Guide: The '80s/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 04:40, 27 September 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * and succeeded in 2000 → add "was" before "succeeded"
 * Done
 * Please add which genres the reviews approached, the fact that the author coined new, non-existing terms during his rewiews, and what exactly critics praised and criticized in the book, to expand the lead
 * I added a sentence, but I avoided listing genres; readers will get the point with "a variety of", and only one coined term is reported in the sources. Dan56 (talk) 22:54, 7 October 2018 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Please include ALT for the picture
 * Done. Dan56 (talk) 22:54, 7 October 2018 (UTC)

Content and scope

 * Among the styles of music covered throughout include → I would add Christgau's Record Guide: The '80s in the sentence after "throughout" for a better flow
 * Added "the collection".
 * decade's major developments while coining → add comma before "while"
 * "Don’t use a comma before while when you mean 'during the same time.'
 * categorized as "Gone But Not Forgotten" → you should include what this is exactly (a column,...)
 * It explains beforehand: "a core collection of albums before 1980 ... out of print records" Dan56 (talk) 22:56, 7 October 2018 (UTC)

Publication and reception

 * in October 1990 by Pantheon Books.[2] It was reprinted → to avoid short, clipped sentences, please rewrite to: "in October 1990 by Pantheon Books.[2] and was reprinted..."
 * Done.
 * We don't need an extra, one-line paragraph for the book's release details. This could be easily combined with the second paragraph and would look better aestethically
 * Nine long sentences in one paragraph makes too long a paragraph, for my taste. I joined it with the second paragraph, but split Lawson's critical assessment into a separate paragraph.
 * We need an 'overall-sentence' for the reception of the book, such as: "Upon its release, Christgau's Record Guide: The '80s was received mixed reviews from critics."
 * There's no source available to verify a summary; I am pushing it with the lead summarizing it as "generally well received".
 * how his interest extends beyond individual recording artists and into "the state of rock and in the richness of its culture"; how he "constantly challenges artists, fans and other critics to demand more of themselves and their favorites"; and "why he nurtures new and significant developments, however uncommercial or controversial." → please replace all semicolons with normal commas, since this is an enumeration and not separate sentences
 * Semicolons can be used "between items in a list or series if any of the items contain commas." They do not have to be sentences that are separated. I used semicolons, to avoid too many commas.
 * while noting a partiality → comma before "while"
 * "Don’t use a comma before while when you mean 'during the same time.'
 * citing his review of the 1987 X album See How We Are → to make the message of this short sentence clearer, I would revise to: "citing his review of the 1987 X album See How We Are as an example for the latter
 * Done.
 * for popular music, and the journalistic equivalent of Bob Dylan or Neil Young: "Quite simply → This is an everlasting sentence; please break it into: "for popular music. Hilburn also likened Christgau as the journalistic equivalent of Bob Dylan or Neil Young, further writing: "Quite simply..."
 * I broke it up earlier.
 * while the book covers only → comma before "while"
 * Done.
 * John Lawson of the School Library Journal said → I think the sentence would flow better if you added a "that" after "said"
 * With a comma already there, there's enough separation with the pause, in my opinion, without needing "that".
 * was less impressed → this has an unencyclopedic tone; please change to "gave a mixed review"
 * I revised it.
 * A follow-up to The '80s → Even though it may be repetitive, please use the book's full name
 * Unless I am missing a guideline or policy, I don't believe using the subtitle or shorthand is bad writing, especially when the full title has been repeated earlier several times.
 * singled out The '80s volume → same as above
 * Same as above. Dan56 (talk) 23:23, 7 October 2018 (UTC)

Outcome

 * — Minor issues that can be easily solved in 7 days. Good job! Please ping me whenever you're ready... Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * ; I addressed most of the issues, commenting on a few I didn't. Dan56 (talk) 23:30, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * While I adjusted just a few things, I think this article meets the GA criteria now, thus I'm passing it! Congratulations! I also have a nomination waiting to be reviewed for a long time—if you're interested—or you could pick any other nomination of mine in the "Albums", "Songs" and "Other music articles" categories. Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 04:40, 8 October 2018 (UTC)