Talk:Christina Milian/GA1

GA Review
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I will be reviewing this article. I plan on finishing the review, hopefully, within the next few days. – Ms. Sarita  Confer  07:42, 12 November 2008 (UTC)

Quotes
Early life
 * ..."in hopes of landing a wider range of acting roles."
 * ..."it took some time to convince them."
 * ..."didn't have too many friends".
 * ..."always wanted to be in the record business"...
 * Done.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:41, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

It's About Time, 2003–2005
 * ..."between six months to a year"...
 * ..."it's a new me."
 * Done.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:41, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

So Amazin', 2006–2007
 * ..."found a really great chemistry with Cool and Dre"...
 * ..."a mutual decision"...
 * ..."gotten a lot of offers"...
 * Fixed or removed.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:41, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Future music, 2008
 * ..."love to do something with [producer] Timbaland."
 * ..."hint[ed] at potential collaborative surprises down the line."
 * Done.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:41, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Personal life
 * ..."a big sister to foster children,"...
 * She said that she had "never been rewarded that way and never been acknowledged like that. That was really nice of them, and I was happy I was able to show up for the kids." In this sentence, I would write it something like, She said, "I’ve never been rewarded that way and never been acknowledged like that. That was really nice of them, and I was happy I was able to show up for the kids."
 * ..."[has] no idea who Eric West is".
 * ..."make it work".
 * Good idea, fixed.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:41, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Here are some quotes that I believe can be revised into prose. I don't believe that they add anything more whether they are in quotes or are written in prose. Let me know what you think. – Ms. Sarita  Confer  10:05, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Wow, I didn't realize there were so many redundant quotes. Thanks for taking the time and naming them all, and I belive they have all been fixed/merged.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:41, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * It's funny because I didn't realize it either until I looked over the article again. There actually weren't as many as I thought. – Ms. Sarita  Confer  12:03, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Hi all... I just wanted to introduce myself to Cornucopia, as I'm lurking around this review. Cornucopia, Ms. Sarita asked me to be her "mentor" for her first few GA reviews, so I'm going to be hanging around, reading everything, and maybe commenting a little bit. So far, from what I've seen, Ms. Sarita, you have done a great job with the review. Very thorough, especially with the references. Nice work, and I'll keep lurking. I have this page watchlisted, so drop me a note here if you've got any questions for me regarding this review. Dana boomer (talk) 14:32, 13 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments from DanaBoomer
 * Okay, cool. Nice to know that this page is receiving extra attention. ;)  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  05:22, 14 November 2008 (UTC)

I'm going to put my response to the references down here, so that it doesn't get lost in the constructive discussion above :) Per WP:REF, you need to have a reference directly after a quote.  I know it gets messy, but this is what the rules say...  Another suggestion (brought up by Ms. Sarita on my talk page) would be to integrate some of the less necessary quotes into the prose so that you didn't need so many refs in the middle of sentences. Dana boomer (talk) 13:34, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I know about that rule, but I think it's more of a rule of thumb. Have a look at the recently promoted FA's: Featured article candidates/Featured log/October 2008. I think most, if not all, have quotes that are not directly followed by a ref. A specific example: The Other Woman. Reviewers found several prose problems, however none said anything about the ref problem. If FA reviewers do not find this to be a problem, I'm guessing it will be fine for a good article. Thoughts?  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  05:36, 17 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I suppose if they're letting it go at FA, then it'll be fine at GA. I wish they would make up their minds... *grumble, grumble, sigh* :)  I guess the best solution would be to integrate some of the quotes if you can, and make sure the rest are referenced someplace nearby (which you seem to have already). And I have no idea what's going on with the formatting...this is a different template than I usually use, so I'm not sure what to tweak to get it to go back right again... Dana boomer (talk) 21:23, 18 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Thanks Dana Boomer. I appreciate it. So, Cornucopia, just go through the article real quick and try to fix some of the quotes if you can. Just clean it up a little. Let me know when you're finished. – Ms. Sarita  Confer  22:17, 18 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I tried going through the article, but I cannot find places that need to be fixed. There is a quote directly after most quotes, and in some cases, directly after the next sentence. Are there any place in particular that you feel need fixing? I can't see any, so tell me what you think. :)  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  09:05, 19 November 2008 (UTC)