Talk:Chrysler Turbine Car/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Eric Corbett (talk · contribs) 02:27, 11 January 2018 (UTC)

Detailed comments
Lead
 * The (rather short) lead doesn't adequately summarise the article. For instance, there's nothing about user feedback, performance, fuel economy, or failure to meet emission controls.
 * Thanks, Eric. I've taken the time to address this extensively, and have expanded the lede significantly. I am pretty much satisfied with it, but if you have any further recommendations, please feel free to let me know or make them yourself. At this point, I now believe I have addressed all your comments; please let me know if I am mistaken. Michael Barera (talk) 19:12, 14 January 2018 (UTC)
 * That's excellent!  Eric   Corbett  20:20, 14 January 2018 (UTC)

Engine
 * "The car was powered by the A-831 ..." What car are we talking about?
 * The Chrysler Turbine Car, the subject of the article. I've clarified this now. Michael Barera (talk) 18:26, 14 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "The engine produced 130 hp (97 kW) ... It produced 130 brake horsepower (97 kW) ..." Are we not saying the same thing twice here? Why hp and bhp?
 * Yes, thanks for catching that. I've merged those two sentences into a single one. Michael Barera (talk) 18:26, 14 January 2018 (UTC)

Legacy
 * "One, owned by Frank Kleptz of Fort Wayne, Indiana ... sold to Kleptz in Hershey, Pennsylvania." I don't think I follow that. Why is relevant where he bought the car anyway?
 * It is not; I have removed the location of the sale (Hershey), but I do think it is important to note where the cars are located, both currently and in the past. Michael Barera (talk) 18:36, 14 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "The second, owned by comedian and television host Jay Leno, who purchased one of the three Chrysler Turbine Cars originally retained by the company in 2009." That sentence doesn't really work.
 * I completely agree. I rewrote it to "The second is owned by comedian and television host Jay Leno, who in 2009 purchased one of the three Turbine Cars originally retained by Chrysler." I think this solves the problem. Michael Barera (talk) 18:36, 14 January 2018 (UTC)


 * This is a really nice article that's obviously seen a lot of good work, so I'm very happy to be able to close this review with a pass. Eric   Corbett  20:20, 14 January 2018 (UTC)