Talk:Church Administration Building/GA1

GA Review
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as only pertinent church officers and their guests are permitted entry. This needs a ref. As part of the festivities for the 2002 Winter Olympics in Salt Lake City, the Olympic torch was passed through the hands of members of the First Presidency and the Quorum of the Twelve Apostles on the steps of the Church Administration Building. If you wikilink "First Presidency" and "Quorum of the Twelve Apostles", I don't think you need to link it again.
 * Done. —Eustress talk 04:08, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Agreed. —Eustress talk 04:08, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Several general authorities have shared stories about experiences in the Church Administration Building that have enriched the legacy of the building and increased its importance among Latter-day Saints. Saying is has "enriched the legacy of the building and increased its importance among Latter-day Saints" is really original research.
 * I think it's just an elegant summary. Wrad (talk) 04:03, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Agree with Wrad. —Eustress talk 04:08, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

In another story, Thomas S. Monson shared in a fireside on the importance of the priesthood a story about he and his almost-12-year-old son and then-Church President Harold B. Lee. He shared "in a fireside"?
 * Haha. Mormon lingo. Wrad (talk) 04:03, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I wikilinked to Fireside (LDS Church) and reworded to make more understandable. —Eustress talk 04:13, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

''...are all attributed to this building." What does that mean? That these stories took place in the building, or what?
 * Yeah, that's what I'm trying to say while tying it all back to the section title Legacy. I've modified it to hopefully be more clear. —Eustress talk 04:20, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Noble Story (talk • contributions) 03:11, 21 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your review. I have tried to address the issues above. —Eustress talk 04:20, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Images
Now, about the images. I don't know about you, but I think those two images near the bottom are a bit too large, and overrun the section (if you know what I mean). Is there any way you could make it a bit smaller? Noble Story (talk • contributions) 04:23, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I actually thought they fit kind of nicely, especially since they can't be forced above the horizontal ending of the infobox; and it's okay to make images larger when they have a lot of detail (MOS:IMAGES), but if you really want to make them smaller then that's fine. —Eustress talk 04:28, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Not essential, I guess. Your choice. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 04:32, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Plagiarism
And also, take a look at this: ''Constructed between 1914 and 1917, the building is built of quartz monzonite from the same quarry in Little Cottonwood Canyon as the stone used for the Utah State Capitol and the nearby Salt Lake Temple. The Mt. Nebo Marble Company supplied marble and travertine for the interior of the CAB. The company quarried Birdseye marble in the Thistle area of Utah County, and travertine and onyx at Pelican Point near Utah Lake in Utah County and in the Cedar Mountains of Tooele County.[15]''

Original source:

" This building was constructed between 1914 and 1917 of quartz monzonite from the same quarry in Little Cottonwood Canyon as the stone used for Utah's State Capitol and the nearby LDS Temple...The Mt. Nebo Marble company supplied marble and travertine for the interior of the Administration Building. The company quarried Birdseye marble in the Thistle area of Utah County, and travertine and onyx marble at Pelican Point near Utah Lake in Utah County and in the Cedar Mountains of Tooele Count"

This is almost a straight copy and paste. It needs to be reworded. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 04:25, 21 February 2009 (UTC)


 * I added quotes for the verbatim text and an extra inline citation for the paraphrased text to avoid any appearance of plagiarism. —Eustress talk 04:56, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * The company quarried Birdseye marble in the Thistle area of Utah County, and travertine and onyx at Pelican Point near Utah Lake in Utah County and in the Cedar Mountains of Tooele County. Having this whole sentence in quotations is a bit funny. Any chance you can reword it? Noble Story (talk • contributions) 07:50, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * This appears to be a matter of personal preference unrelated to the GA criteria, so I'll leave it to you if you feel it needs changing. —Eustress talk 08:21, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * MOS:QUOTE says that "The author of a quote of a full sentence or more should be named; this is done in the main text and not in a footnote." I think you could at least do that, if you insist of still quoting it. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 10:16, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Done. —Eustress talk 17:24, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Final Words
It appears this now passes the GA criteria. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 11:17, 22 February 2009 (UTC)