Talk:Church murals in Sweden/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 07:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

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Lead

 * Church murals or church wall paintings are decorative paintings, mostly medieval, found in several Swedish churches where they adorn the vaults or walls of the buildings. Condense.
 * ✅ Split it up and skipped some words. Yakikaki (talk) 14:06, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * using lime as binding medium for the paint The binding medium.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:06, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * virtually nothing is known about their identity. Identities.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:06, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Around 1250, there is a stylistic shift towards Gothic style. The composition of the murals becomes lighter and more airy, while some iconographic changes can be observed. Marian themes and Christian mysticism become more popular. Combine, change to past-tense, and condense. Consider: Around 1250, there was a stylistic shift towards Gothic that saw lighter and more airy compositions and the rising popularity of Marian and Christian mystic motifs.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:06, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * They tend to cover the entire painted surface. This is redundant; paintings always cover the painted surface.
 * Changed to "wall surface", that was the point. Yakikaki (talk) 14:06, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Romanesque murals

 * In many cases, only fragments remain.[1] The remains that do exist constitute only a small portion of the original works.[1][3] The second sentence is redundant.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Remains exist in c. 50 churches [...] In about 50 churches.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * The only known Romanesque murals north of Lake Mälaren are in Romfartuna Church. Which province is Romfartuna Church located in?
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * or on the surface of the underside of the chancel arch. Delete "the surface of". The alternative to the surface would make the painting impossible to perceive.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * The chancel arch could also contain images of saints or donor portraits.[8] Sometimes a depiction of the Passion was painted above the chancel arch.[8] Combine.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Early and High Gothic murals

 * There were also stylistic changes. This is made redundant by the first sentence of the section (and paragraph).
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * becomes more frequent Became.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * when wooden church ceilings and barrel vaults began to be replaced by groin vaults. What material were the new vaults made of?
 * Bricks or stone. Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Late Gothic murals

 * The murals tend to cover all or most of the painted surface [...] See above.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * [...] was typically decorated [...] Were.
 * I may be mistaken but doesn't "was" here refer to "The entire church" rather than "walls and vaults"?
 * Oh, oops, it does. My bad. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  00:44, 13 May 2020 (UTC)

Technique

 * There were therefore applied [...] They were.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * [...] have faded by exposure to sunlight [...] Because of exposure.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Artists

 * Nothing further is however known about these artists. Redundant.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * [...] more loosely, works showing [...] More loosely to works showing
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)


 * [...] certain stylistic relations with each other [...] Replace "relations" with "similarities".
 * Yakikaki (talk) 14:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

GA progress
Article passes CopyVio with a mere 9.1% likelihood. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  07:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Images are tagged/free and relevant to the article. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  07:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Sources are reliable. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  07:21, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

All external links present in the article are working optimally. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  00:35, 13 May 2020 (UTC)