Talk:Church of the SubGenius/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 01:13, 29 October 2012 (UTC)

Review
Prose comments
 * On X-Day
 * "Steve Bevilacqua, the Church's business manager, drew a parallel between their group's predictions and aspects of well-established religions."
 * I feel that it is a bit incomplete. Would you expand a bit on which that parallel was?
 * Checked the source again and rephrased a bit. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)


 * On Publishing
 * "The Church of the SubGenius emerged on the Internet in May 1993,"
 * It would be good if you explain a bit how they emerged. What they did that promted this exposure on internet? [as an example]
 * I took another look at the source, and I think it's saying that their website first came online in May '93. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)
 * "Their holy books are disordered"
 * Do you really mean "holy"? :O [optional]
 * Hmm... that's a good point. Changed "holy books" to "core texts". Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)


 * On Comparative religion
 * "The American journalist Michael Muhammad Knight likens the Church to the Moorish Orthodox Church of America, a 20th-century American syncretic religious movement."
 * It'll be good if you expand a bit onto how he likened both (how he made the comparison). [optional]
 * It's a little tricky, since he describes them each separately, but I've added a brief (and somewhat vague) note about how he summarizes them. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the comments, I've taken a shot at handling them. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Great. I am done with the article. passed.

— ΛΧΣ  21™  01:21, 9 November 2012 (UTC)