Talk:Ciega, Sordomuda/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:46, 12 June 2022 (UTC)

It is appropriate that my first review for you in some time is for the GAN backlog drive! --K. Peake 08:46, 12 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * A release in Mexico needs to be mentioned in the body to warrant the cover being listed as Mexican
 * Remove the usage of the word studios from the parameter
 * The release sentence should be the third of the para instead
 * "and Estéfano with the artist and" → "and Estéfano, while produced by the singer and" however, you need to mention the producers in the body too
 * "it utilizes mariachi horns and lyrically that equates" → "it utilizes mariachi trumpets and lyrically equates"
 * The music video info should be directly before live performances in the second para instead
 * "A music video was filmed" → "An accompanying music video was filmed"
 * Wikilink Gustavo Garzón
 * "music critics who praised the instruments used and compared it to her" → "music critics, who praised the instruments used and compared it to Shakira's"
 * "It was nominated in" → "The song was nominated in"
 * "and was a recipient of an" → "and was a recipient of a"
 * "The track was included in" → "The song was included in"
 * "She also performed" → "Shakira also performed"
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * "for the MTV Unplugged live album." → "for her first live album, MTV Unplugged (2000)."

Background and composition

 * "After Shakira rose to prominence with the success of her major-label debut" → "After rising to prominence with the success of her major-label debut album"
 * "into the US Latin market. One of Shakira's concerns" → "into the US Latin market, though one of Shakira's concerns" with the pipe
 * "the roles and duties were defined:" → "the roles and duties were finalized:"
 * "on this project"." → "on this project."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * "Since then, they started working on" → "After that, they started working at"
 * "on end, I wouldn't stop"." → "on end, I wouldn't stop."" also, this sentence needs the appropriate citation(s) at the end
 * Wikilink amplifiers per WP:PIPE
 * "than her previous records since more people worked on this album." → "than Shakira's previous records since more people were involved."
 * In the co-writing sentence, also mention who she produced the track with
 * "It is a pop rock song" → "Musically, "Ciega, Sordomuda" is a pop rock song"
 * "Lyrically, she describes herself" → "Lyrically, Shakira describes herself"
 * Why is there a space between foolish and the comma?

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception per awards being included
 * Shouldn't you order the reviews by ones that praised the instrumentation first since that is what the lead mentions initially?
 * Introduce "Estoy Aquí" as being Shakira's breakthrough hit and add the release year
 * "called it a" → "called the song a"
 * "strum of guitars."" → "strum of guitars"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "of the album's "catchy tunes"[11]" → "of the album's "catchy tunes",[11] while" merging with the following sentence
 * "and also compared it to" → "and also made a comparison to"
 * "but lost to" → "but ultimately lost to"
 * Pipe BMI Latin Awards to BMI Film & TV Awards
 * "of 1998" with Leila Cobo noting that it" → "of 1998", with Leila Cobo noting that the song"
 * "up to that point."" → "up to that point"."
 * "26 Best Songs on HipLatina." → "26 Best Songs by HipLatina."

Commercial performance

 * Make this the third para of reception instead per the overly short size
 * Remove pipe on Billboard
 * "later where the track spent three week at" → "later, spending three weeks at"

Promotion and live performances

 * Any specific countries where it was released to radio stations? Also, mention in the sentence that the release was as the album's lead single.
 * "on her greatest hits album" → "on Shakira's greatest hits album" with the wikilink
 * Wikilink music video
 * "and escapes with her" → "and escaping with her"
 * "several policemen who are" → "several policemen, who are"
 * "It was nominated in" → "The video was nominated in"
 * "but lost to" → "but ultimately lost to"
 * Pipe Arrowhead Pond to Honda Center
 * Reword the sentence to something like the Los Angeles Times writer noted Shakira's "disjointed robotic movements" while she performed the track at the Arrowhead Pond in 2000
 * SpinningPlatters.com → Spinning Platters
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on New York City
 * "where she accompanied by" → "where she was accompanied by"
 * Wikilink live album
 * "As part of the Latin Recording Academy" → "As part of The Latin Recording Academy" with the wikilink

Formats and track listings

 * Good

Credits and personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 * Any specific order here?
 * Why are Lester Mendez and Shakira listed as co-producers?
 * Pipe mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; nice work on this! --K. Peake 10:36, 12 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Let me finish the GAR for Dejaría Todo, then I will get to this article! Erick (talk) 18:32, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
 * No problem with that whatsoever; I gladly await your response! --K. Peake 20:47, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
 * @Kyle PeakeAnd...done! Well ok, so I deviated a bit with the suggestions, namely not using work and publisher simultaneously for sources. I based this on the last GAR I had. For the personnel, it's meant to be in alphabetical order, but I screwed up a bit, and now it's fixed! How's the article look now? Erick (talk) 14:53, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, the refs look fine really! --K. Peake 15:04, 20 June 2022 (UTC)